写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Avoid repetition and filler words (uh, actually, I I). Use linking words if you add detail.

示例: No, I don't write a lot. I usually memorize things instead because I find it faster and more convenient. However, I do write short notes occasionally to remember important points.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence naming what you write, then give a specific reason and a short example. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I write' not 'I writing') and finish your example with a result. Use a linking word like 'for example' and conclude the point.

示例: I like to write plans because they help me reach my goals. For example, I write a daily to-do list every morning, and by the end of the day I usually complete most of the tasks.

建议: Give a clear, concise answer (Yes/No with brief reason). Avoid hesitations and finish your example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'if' to explain conditions that cause changes.

示例: Yes, what I write often changes because plans depend on circumstances. For example, if I don't have enough time, I usually postpone some tasks and update my plan accordingly.

建议: Answer directly with a topic sentence stating your preference, then give a specific reason and a complete example. Reduce fillers and finish the example sentence. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

示例: I prefer handwriting because writing on paper feels more personal and helps me remember things better. For example, when I record a special memory I usually write it in a notebook rather than on my phone.

建议: Give a clear frequency (e.g., rarely, once a week) with a reason. Avoid repeating the word 'diaries' many times and remove fillers. If possible, add a short example of when you do write.

示例: I rarely keep a diary because I am usually too busy. For instance, I might write a short entry once a month after a significant trip or event.

建议: Start with a topic sentence listing the main methods, then give one specific example and link ideas with 'for example' or 'also'. Avoid filler words and finish your example clearly.

示例: I use several methods to record my life, such as short notes on my smartphone, photos, and videos. For example, during a trip I usually take photos and record short videos so I can remember the places and moments later.

× Well, actually I'm not writing a lot.

✓ Well, actually I don't write a lot.

The speaker refers to a habitual action, so simple present is required (I don't write) rather than present continuous (I'm not writing), which implies an action happening now.

× I prefer to memorize everything and I think that it's a better way to do something or plan for something.

✓ I prefer to memorize things, and I think it's a better way to do or plan something.

The original is wordy and slightly ungrammatical. 'Memorize everything' is often better as 'memorize things.' The phrase order is improved to 'do or plan something.' Use simple parallel structure for clarity.

× And I I didn't like writing very much.

✓ And I didn't like writing very much.

Remove the repeated 'I'. The past tense 'didn't like' is acceptable if referring to past preference; if meaning present, use 'I don't like writing very much.' Ensure tense matches intended time.

× What do you like to write? Why?

✓ What do you like to write? Why?

This sentence is correct as written; no grammatical correction needed. It uses correct question formation and pronouns.

× For example, I writing my daily plans on paper at morning and at the end of the day I found that the most of them is.

✓ For example, I write my daily plans on paper in the morning, and at the end of the day I find that most of them are completed.

Habitual action requires simple present 'I write' not 'I writing'. Use 'in the morning' not 'at morning'. 'Most of them' is followed by plural verb 'are' and complete the idea with 'completed' for clarity. 'Found' should be present 'find' to match habitual present.

× Do you think the things you write would change?

✓ Do you think the things you write will change?

In a direct question about future likelihood, 'will' is more natural than 'would'. 'Would' is conditional or more tentative; use 'will' for simple future prediction.

× Actually, yes, uh, it's uh, uh, more possibility.

✓ Actually, yes, there is more possibility.

The speaker's filler words create unclear structure. 'There is more possibility' is still awkward; better: 'Actually, yes, it's more likely.' Using 'it's more likely' is clearer and idiomatic.

× Uh, and this may, uh, the things that I write, uh, would be changed or, uh, would not change.

✓ And the things I write may change or may not change.

Remove filler and reorder to 'may change or may not change.' Use 'may' for possibility and avoid redundant 'would' which is unnecessary here.

× It, uh, depends on the situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

Remove filler 'uh'; the sentence is otherwise correct. Present simple 'depends' is appropriate.

× For example, I planned for something and I can, I have not enough time to do it and I can, uh, achieve the.

✓ For example, I plan something but sometimes I don't have enough time to do it, so I cannot achieve it.

Match tense to general habit: use simple present 'I plan' and 'I don't have'. 'Have not enough' is unidiomatic; use 'don't have enough'. Complete the clause with 'achieve it' and use 'cannot' for inability.

× I prefer handwriting because I'm writing on the paper.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I write on paper.

For a habitual preference use simple present 'I write' rather than present continuous 'I'm writing'. Use 'on paper' not 'on the paper' for general statement.

× Uh, give me a good feeling about uh, writing, uh, but when I uh, write something on my, uh, smartphone or uh, typing, uh, it's not a good feeling.

✓ It gives me a good feeling to write by hand, but when I type on my smartphone it doesn't feel as good.

Use 'gives me' to match subject 'writing by hand'. 'Typing' should be expressed as a verb clause 'when I type'. Ensure pronoun and verb agreement: 'it doesn't feel as good.'

× For example, when I want to write a memory, I rather.

✓ For example, when I want to record a memory, I prefer to write it by hand.

'I rather' is incomplete; use 'I prefer to...' and specify the action. 'Write a memory' is better as 'record a memory.'

× Uh, actually I keep, uh, my Diaries, uh, uh, very rarely, but, uh, I think that is a good, uh, thing, uh, that we write our Diaries, but I have not enough time to write Diaries, uh, in a diary book or, uh, in a small.

✓ Actually, I keep a diary very rarely, but I think it's good to write a diary. I don't have enough time to write in a diary book or a small notebook.

Use singular 'a diary' or uncountable 'diary writing'. 'Diaries' plural is awkward when referring to one's diary. 'I have not enough time' should be 'I don't have enough time.' Specify 'a small notebook' to complete idea.

× What other methods do you use to record your life?

✓ What other methods do you use to record your life?

This question is grammatically correct; no change required.

× Sometimes I write Diaries or sometimes I uh, write a note on a smartphone, uh, or sometimes I take a photo or, uh, take a video from my uh, daily activities.

✓ Sometimes I write in a diary, or I write a note on my smartphone, or I take a photo or record a video of my daily activities.

Use 'write in a diary' rather than 'write Diaries'. 'Write a note on my smartphone' is more natural. Use 'record a video of' rather than 'take a video from'.

× Or when I, uh, for example, in a journey, I uh, try to.

✓ For example, when I am on a trip, I try to write or take photos to record it.

Complete the sentence: 'when I am on a trip' is the correct phrase. Finish with a clear action such as 'try to write or take photos.' Use present simple for habitual actions.