写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases such as 'cannot that kind of person' and 'I write quite laugh'. Try to give a clear, concise response directly addressing the question, avoiding filler words like 'uh'.

示例: No, I don't write a lot. Most of my subjects are practical, so I don't have many writing assignments. Also, I don't enjoy writing in my personal life, unlike some people who like to write poems or stories.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences and confusing phrases like 'Code articles why you have to write assignments'. Focus on giving a clear, complete answer with relevant details and avoid fragmented sentences.

示例: I don't write much, but I do write assignments for some of my subjects because they require written work. I usually write essays or reports for these classes.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'We no longer dare to be written but me'. Try to organize your thoughts clearly and use complete sentences to express your ideas logically.

示例: I don't think the things I write will change much now because I'm in my last semester. However, when I start working, I might have to write reports or emails, so my writing style may change then.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but contains some awkward phrases like 'like eyes writing exam' and 'write in speed with family'. Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar to improve clarity.

示例: It depends on what I'm writing. For quick notes or shopping lists, I prefer typing on my phone. But for exams or giving advice, I like handwriting because it's faster and easier for me.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'kept dying in my bed' and 'parking diary to write any situation that happens to give cartoons'. Focus on clear, relevant details and avoid unrelated or unclear information.

示例: I don't usually keep a personal diary, but during my last semester, I took notes for a subject. Also, when I worked at a security company, I kept a logbook to record any incidents that happened.

建议: Your answer has some good ideas but is unclear and contradictory, especially saying 'making videos or taking pictures is bad' after stating you capture many pictures. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically with appropriate vocabulary.

示例: I like to take many pictures to record my life and keep beautiful memories. For things I can't capture in photos, I write notes on my smartphone. I don't usually make videos because I find them difficult to edit.

× but cannot that kind of person.

✓ but I am not that kind of person.

The original sentence lacks a subject pronoun and verb, making it incomplete and unclear. Adding 'I am' clarifies the subject and verb, correcting the sentence structure.

× So I would say I write quite laugh.

✓ So I would say I write quite little.

The word 'laugh' is incorrectly used here; the intended meaning is likely 'little' to indicate a small amount. Using the correct adverb 'little' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Even though I studied, I have a little.

✓ Even though I studied, I write a little.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding the verb 'write' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Right, so I do write my assignments in my additional subjects because those subjects are.

✓ Right, so I do write my assignments in my additional subjects because those subjects require it.

The original sentence ends abruptly and lacks a clear predicate. Adding 'require it' completes the thought and improves sentence structure.

× Code articles why you have to write assignments.

✓ Because of the course requirements, you have to write assignments.

The original sentence is unclear and seems to misuse words. Replacing 'Code articles' with 'Because of the course requirements' clarifies the meaning and corrects the pronoun usage.

× I usually write assignments which will. We no longer dare to be written but me.

✓ I usually write assignments, but I will no longer have to write them after this semester.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Reconstructing it provides a clear and grammatically correct statement.

× Be increasing when I get a job, Maybe there is something that I will have to write?

✓ It will increase when I get a job. Maybe there will be something that I will have to write.

The original sentence lacks proper subject and verb agreement and is fragmented. Adding 'It will increase' and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammar.

× If I have to write any shop note or make any list, I would prefer typing it in my phone.

✓ If I have to write any short note or make any list, I would prefer typing it on my phone.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'phone'; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to devices. Also, 'shop note' seems to be a typo for 'short note'.

× But if I'm giving any kind of advice? And like eyes writing exam, I would prefer writing with pen and paper because it's quite easy for me to write and you can write in speed with family.

✓ But if I'm giving any kind of advice or writing an exam, I would prefer writing with pen and paper because it's quite easy for me to write and I can write quickly and comfortably.

The original sentence contains unclear phrases like 'like eyes writing exam' and 'write in speed with family.' These are corrected to clear, grammatically correct expressions.

× I really keep Diaries because in my last semester I had a subject where I had to make notes, so I kept dying in my bed at that time and also I worked in a security company where I had to keep.

✓ I really keep diaries because in my last semester I had a subject where I had to make notes, so I kept writing in my diary at that time. Also, I worked in a security company where I had to keep records.

The original sentence misuses 'dying' instead of 'diary' and is incomplete at the end. Correcting these errors clarifies the meaning and improves grammar.

× Parking diary to write any, uh, situation that happens to give cartoons.

✓ a parking diary to write about any situation that happens during my shift.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Reconstructing it provides a complete and meaningful sentence.

× I would say that I capture a lot of pictures to record my life and keep the beautiful memories and there are some things that I cannot capture, so I write.

✓ I would say that I capture a lot of pictures to record my life and keep beautiful memories, and there are some things that I cannot capture, so I write them down.

The original sentence ends abruptly after 'write.' Adding 'them down' completes the thought and improves clarity.

× In my N section in my smartphone.

✓ In the notes section on my smartphone.

The phrase 'N section' is unclear and likely a typo for 'notes section.' Also, the preposition 'in' is corrected to 'on' for devices.

× But I think making videos or taking pictures is bad.

✓ But I think making videos or taking pictures is good.

The original sentence contradicts the positive context of recording life. Changing 'bad' to 'good' aligns with the intended meaning.