写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议加强基础语法和词汇的准确使用，避免拼写错误，如"Ioffer white soda"应为"I often write reports"，并且回答应更简洁自然。

示例: Yes, I often write reports at work and keep a diary at home. Writing helps me express my thoughts because I am an introverted person.

建议: 回答表达不够连贯，语法和句子结构有误，建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，并且明确说明写作的原因。

示例: I like to write stories about my daily life and conflicts between people because this process helps me think more clearly and rationally.

建议: 回答内容较丰富，但表达不够准确，建议注意时态和句子结构，避免重复和语气词，内容应更连贯。

示例: Yes, my writing has changed. When I was a child and in middle school, I often read and wrote poems about my feelings. Recently, I read more academic papers.

建议: 回答中有较多语气词和不完整表达，建议减少口头语，使用完整句子表达观点，并且逻辑更清晰。

示例: Before I graduated from college, I used to write by hand because it helped me relieve stress and remember things better. But after starting work, I prefer typing.

建议: 回答中有拼写错误和语法错误，表达不清晰，建议加强时态和词汇的准确使用，避免重复和错误拼写。

示例: I often kept diaries when I was in middle school and sometimes in college. But recently, I haven't kept diaries because of my busy work schedule.

建议: 回答中有过多语气词，表达不够流畅，建议减少口头语，使用更准确的词汇和句子结构。

示例: Yes, I often take photos to record my life because it is a direct and convenient way to preserve memories.

× Ioffer white soda for reports in the work and I also write some dairy at home and I think it's the most important output process and method for me because I'm an introvert person.

✓ I offer white soda for reports at work and I also write some diary at home and I think it's the most important output process and method for me because I'm an introverted person.

这里'soda'和'dairy'用词错误，应该是'diary'（日记），且'introvert'应为形容词'introverted'。另外，'in the work'应为'at work'。

× Ioffer white soda for reports in the work and I also write some dairy at home and I think it's the most important output process and method for me because I'm an introvert person.

✓ I offer white soda for reports at work and I also write some diary at home and I think it's the most important output process and method for me because I'm an introverted person.

介词'in the work'用法错误，正确用法是'at work'表示在工作场所。

× I'm an introvert person.

✓ I'm an introverted person.

'introvert'是名词，形容词形式应为'introverted'，用来修饰'person'。

× I'm also I would like to write some conflicts between others.

✓ I also would like to write about some conflicts between others.

句中重复使用'I'，且缺少介词'about'来引出写作内容。

× Does process make me more rational and clear? I think.

✓ This process makes me more rational and clear, I think.

原句结构混乱，疑问句形式不合适，应改为陈述句表达观点。

× when I was a child and when I in the middle school, uh, I usually read some poems and the poetry, something like that.

✓ When I was a child and in middle school, I usually read some poems and poetry, something like that.

'when I in the middle school'缺少动词，应为'in middle school'，且时态保持一致。

× Always, uh, emotions about my emotions, my thoughts, my feelings.

✓ They were always about my emotions, my thoughts, my feelings.

句子缺少主语，需补充代词'they'指代前文的诗歌内容。

× But recent I'm reading some papers that's more academic.

✓ But recently I'm reading some papers that are more academic.

'recent'应为副词'recently'，且'that's'应为复数形式'that are'。

× Before I graduated from college, I'm used to like to write by, uh, my hand.

✓ Before I graduated from college, I used to like to write by hand.

'I'm used to'时态错误，应为过去时态'I used to'表示过去习惯。

× I used to like to write by, uh, my hand.

✓ I used to like to write by hand.

'write by my hand'中'by'后不需要' my'，正确表达是'write by hand'。

× And I think it's, uh, very, uh, really.

✓ And I think it's really good.

'very really'搭配不当，应使用'really good'或类似表达。

× I often wrote some wrote keep dairies when I'm in the middle school and also some special parrot in the college that has.

✓ I often wrote some diaries when I was in middle school and also some special parts in college.

'dairies'拼写错误，应为'diaries'；'parrot'应为'parts'；时态应为过去时。

× I often wrote some wrote keep dairies when I'm in the middle school and also some special parrot in the college that has.

✓ I often wrote some diaries when I was in middle school and also some special parts in college.

'I'm in the middle school'时态错误，应为过去时态'I was in middle school'。

× But recently I have a busy schedule for work so I don't didn't keep the Diaries.

✓ But recently I have a busy schedule for work so I haven't kept the diaries.

'don't didn't'重复否定，应使用现在完成时'haven't kept'表示最近的状态。

× I often, uh, used to take some photos to record my laugh, mainly because it's a very, uh, direct and convenient way to record and memorize my life and, uh, allow me have some memories.

✓ I often take some photos to record my life, mainly because it's a very direct and convenient way to record and memorize my life and allows me to have some memories.

'used to'表示过去习惯，句中应为现在时态；'laugh'应为'life'；'allow me have'应为'allows me to have'。

× That's taking photo is a good, uh, method.

✓ Taking photos is a good method.

'That's taking photo'结构不正确，应直接说'Taking photos'；'photo'应为复数'photos'。