写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“write aloud”应为“write a lot”，且回答未直接回应问题。建议直接回答问题并简洁表达。

示例: No, I don't write a lot because my job as a graphic designer mainly involves creating visual content rather than writing.

建议: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多，且缺少连贯的逻辑。建议使用清晰的句子结构，说明喜欢写什么及原因，并使用连接词。

示例: I like to write down sentences spoken by my kids because their words are meaningful and precious to me, so I want to remember them.

建议: 回答中语法和表达混乱，缺少具体细节和连贯性。建议用更准确的语言表达观点，并举例说明。

示例: Yes, I believe what I write changes over time because the world is changing fast, and my thoughts and experiences evolve accordingly.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和重复词汇，表达不够流畅。建议简洁明了地表达偏好，并说明原因。

示例: I prefer typing because it is more convenient and efficient, especially since I use a computer regularly.

建议: 回答较为清晰，但有语法错误和重复。建议使用更准确的时态和简洁表达。

示例: I haven't kept a diary for almost 12 years; the last time I wrote one was in middle school.

建议: 回答表达基本清楚，但有语法错误和多余词汇。建议简洁表达并使用连接词。

示例: I prefer to use my iPhone to take pictures or make videos because they are more vivid and I can look at them anytime.

× Well, to be honest, I don't write aloud because my job is graphic design, so I do a lot of graphics.

✓ Well, to be honest, I don't write aloud because my job is graphic design, so I do a lot of graphic design work.

这里“graphics”用复数形式不太合适，应该用不可数名词“graphic design”来表示职业相关的工作内容。

× Why? Well, normally I would like to write down some sentences spoken by my kids. I think umm, the words they spoke is pretty meaningful and precious and I think that force about.

✓ Why? Well, normally I would like to write down some sentences spoken by my kids. I think umm, the words they speak are pretty meaningful and precious and I think about that a lot.

“the words they spoke is”中“spoke”应改为现在时“speak”，因为表达的是习惯性动作；“is”应改为复数“are”，因为“words”是复数。句子后半部分“that force about”不通顺，改为“think about that a lot”更自然。

× Yeah, definitely. Because I think the world is a changing fast now and of course sometimes instances are right down to maybe change quickly, yeah.

✓ Yeah, definitely. Because I think the world is changing fast now and of course sometimes things are written down to maybe change quickly, yeah.

“a changing fast”中“a”不应出现，且“changing”前不需要冠词；“instances are right down”应为“things are written down”，原句用词错误。

× Well, I prefer MMM typing because I think it's more convenient where I always use seeing the computer and it is also efficient to to transfer this message.

✓ Well, I prefer typing because I think it's more convenient since I always use the computer and it is also efficient to transfer messages.

“where I always use seeing the computer”结构错误，应改为“since I always use the computer”；“to to”重复，应删去一个；“this message”改为复数“messages”更符合语境。

× Well, to be honest, I didn't write the diary for almost 12 years. I remember the last time I wrote the diary was the middle school. Yeah, it's the middle school, which is a quite a long time.

✓ Well, to be honest, I haven't written a diary for almost 12 years. I remember the last time I wrote a diary was in middle school. Yeah, it was middle school, which is quite a long time ago.

“didn't write the diary for almost 12 years”时态不对，应使用现在完成时“haven't written”；“the diary”应改为不定冠词“a diary”；“was the middle school”应为“was in middle school”；“which is a quite a long time”语序错误，应为“which is quite a long time ago”。

× MMM well to recall my life I prefer to use the iPhone to take a picture or make a video, which is I think is will be more vivid and I can check it out anytime.

✓ Well, to recall my life I prefer to use the iPhone to take pictures or make videos, which I think will be more vivid and I can check them out anytime.

“is I think is will be”语序混乱，应改为“which I think will be”；“a picture or make a video”应改为复数形式“pictures or make videos”；“check it out”中的“it”应改为复数“them”，与前面的复数名词一致。