写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中存在语法错误，如时态和动词形式不正确，且表达不够自然。建议注意动词的正确形式，避免重复和冗余，回答时保持简洁且结构清晰。

示例: Yes, I write quite often. I usually keep a diary in my bedroom and sometimes write interesting texts during my Chinese lessons at school.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，句子不完整，表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，明确表达原因，并使用连接词使句子连贯。

示例: I enjoy writing because it offers me a new experience each time. When I feel upset, writing helps me relieve stress and express my imagination.

建议: 回答中语法错误明显，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的主谓一致和时态，表达观点时更具体。

示例: Yes, most of the things I write are temporary. As time passes, my thoughts change, so what I write may not always be accurate.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，建议注意比较级的正确使用，句子结构应更清晰，避免模糊表达。

示例: I prefer typing because it is faster than handwriting. Typing on a screen also gives me more time to think about what I want to write.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，建议注意名词复数形式和动词时态，句子应更流畅自然。

示例: I keep a diary almost once a week. I usually write about exciting events from the week. It is a meaningful experience because I can read my diaries later to remember those moments.

建议: 回答中有重复词汇和语法错误，建议避免重复，使用更准确的词汇，句子结构应更清晰。

示例: Sometimes I take photos of myself, my friends, and family to capture exciting moments and important festivals. I also record videos, which I think are the best ways to document my life.

× Sometimes I writing some diary in my bedroom, and in our high school Chinese lessons I often writing some interesting text in the class.

✓ Sometimes I write some diary in my bedroom, and in our high school Chinese lessons I often write some interesting text in the class.

这里的动词应该用一般现在时的原形write，而不是writing。writing是动名词或现在分词形式，不能直接作为谓语动词使用。

× I am really into writing because write can bring a new experience for me every time.

✓ I am really into writing because writing can bring a new experience for me every time.

这里的write应该用动名词形式writing，因为前面是because引导的原因状语，动词需要用动名词形式。

× When I feel upset outside, I will write that it's a pleasant way to alleviate my pressure.

✓ When I feel upset outside, I will write because it's a pleasant way to alleviate my pressure.

原句中that用法不当，应使用because引导原因状语从句，表达“因为这是缓解压力的愉快方式”。

× Rights can. Fulfill my imaginative.

✓ Writing can fulfill my imagination.

原句中Rights应为Writing，且fulfill后面应接名词imagination，而不是形容词imaginative。句子结构不完整，需要合并为完整句子。

× Yes, most of things I write is temporary and with time grow up, everything has changed and the things I write is not always right.

✓ Yes, most of the things I write are temporary and with time grow up, everything has changed and the things I write are not always right.

things是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式are，而不是is。

× Yes, most of things I write is temporary and with time grow up, everything has changed and the things I write is not always right.

✓ Yes, most of the things I write are temporary and with time growing up, everything has changed and the things I write are not always right.

短语with time grow up不符合习惯表达，应改为with time growing up，使用现在分词作状语。

× Typing is more faster than handwriting and one face screen.

✓ Typing is faster than handwriting and one face screen.

more faster是重复比较级，faster本身就是比较级，不能和more连用。

× Typing is more faster than handwriting and one face screen.

✓ Typing is faster than handwriting and on a flat screen.

one face screen表达不清，应改为on a flat screen，表示“在平面屏幕上”。

× I have more chance to think about what likes to write and I was more suitable to typing on the screen.

✓ I have more chance to think about what I like to write and I am more suitable for typing on the screen.

likes应为like，主语是I；was应为am，时态应与前文保持一致；suitable后接介词for。

× I keep Diaries almost once a week.

✓ I keep diaries almost once a week.

diaries是复数，首字母不应大写。

× I usually recall the excitement things during this week in my Diaries.

✓ I usually recall the exciting things during this week in my diaries.

excitement是名词，修饰things应使用形容词exciting。

× I think it's a very meaningful experience for me and after a long time I can reading these Diaries to recall.

✓ I think it's a very meaningful experience for me and after a long time I can read these diaries to recall.

can后应接动词原形read，而不是现在分词reading。

× Sometimes I will take some photos for me or my friends or my family to recall the excitement, excitement, current moments and also join the important festival.

✓ Sometimes I will take some photos of me or my friends or my family to recall the excitement, current moments and also join important festivals.

take photos后应接介词of表示“……的照片”；重复的excitement应去掉；join后接复数important festivals更合适。

× I will take some important videos for my family and mine.

✓ I will take some important videos for my family and me.

mine是名词性物主代词，不能用作介词宾语，应该用me。

× I think it's a best way to record my life.

✓ I think it's the best way to record my life.

best前应加定冠词the，表示最高级的特指。