写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition and filler words. Use clear and direct sentences to express your feelings about writing.

示例: Yes, I write a lot because it makes me feel happy and helps me relieve stress. Writing is the best way for me to express my inner thoughts.

建议: Be more specific about the topics you write and explain clearly why you choose them. Avoid vague phrases like 'in general' and incomplete sentences.

示例: I mostly write about topics like love and friendship because they are meaningful to me and help me improve my vocabulary.

建议: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid grammatical errors.

示例: Yes, I think what I write changes over time because everything changes quickly, and my interests and experiences evolve.

建议: Make your answer more fluent and natural by removing filler phrases and organizing your ideas clearly. Use linking words to connect your points.

示例: I prefer handwriting because I have good handwriting skills, and writing by hand feels more enjoyable and comfortable since I can physically touch the paper.

建议: Avoid filler words and be more direct. Clarify your current habits and explain your reasons clearly.

示例: I used to keep diaries many years ago, but now I don't. However, I still enjoy writing, so I write on paper instead of keeping a diary.

建议: Reduce hesitation and filler words to make your answer more fluent. Use linking words to explain why taking photos is effective.

示例: I think the best way to record life is by taking photos because they capture special moments and help me remember them clearly.

× Because I do write a lot, because I I'm so happy when I am writing, it makes me feel comfortable and assist me to get rid of a bad energy.

✓ I do write a lot because I am so happy when I write; it makes me feel comfortable and helps me get rid of bad energy.

The original sentence has redundant conjunctions and awkward phrasing. 'Because' is repeated unnecessarily, and 'assist me' should be 'helps me' to match the subject. Also, 'a bad energy' is incorrect; 'bad energy' is uncountable and does not need an article. Simplifying the sentence and correcting verb forms improves clarity and grammar.

× Honestly, mostly I write about in general, for example love, friendship and etcetera.

✓ Honestly, I mostly write in general about topics like love, friendship, and so on.

The phrase 'write about in general' is awkward and incorrect. The preposition 'about' should directly follow 'write' and 'in general' should be placed appropriately. Also, 'and etcetera' is redundant; 'etcetera' alone suffices or 'and so on' is better. Rearranging the sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× Yeah, because it's depends of time management because everything change fastly and this is also can be happen such so yes.

✓ Yeah, because it depends on time management; everything changes quickly, and this can also happen, so yes.

'It's depends' is incorrect; 'depends' does not need 'it is'. The preposition 'of' should be 'on' after 'depends'. 'Change fastly' is incorrect; the adverb form is 'quickly'. 'This is also can be happen such' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'this can also happen'. Correcting verb forms, prepositions, and word order improves the sentence.

× And you know, I have a better handwriting, a skill I would say apart when you write your own hand, this is more, more enjoyable and comfortable because you touch the paper.

✓ And you know, I have better handwriting, a skill I would say. Also, when you write by hand, it is more enjoyable and comfortable because you touch the paper.

'A better handwriting' is incorrect; 'handwriting' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. 'Apart when you write your own hand' is unclear and ungrammatical; 'when you write by hand' is correct. The sentence is split for clarity. Correcting article use and pronoun references improves grammar and clarity.

× You know, it was many, many years ago, but now honestly, I don't use Diaries, but I love writing.

✓ You know, it was many, many years ago, but now honestly, I don't keep diaries, but I love writing.

'Use Diaries' is incorrect; the verb 'use' is not typically used with 'diaries'. The correct verb is 'keep diaries'. Also, 'Diaries' should not be capitalized. Correcting verb choice and capitalization improves grammar.

× I think for this, uh, best way to record your, uh, own life is, uh, take a photo because when you, uh, you are taking a photo, uh, you umm, stop a moment when you are in this situation and it is memorable.

✓ I think the best way to record your own life is to take a photo because when you are taking a photo, you stop a moment in that situation, and it becomes memorable.

'I think for this, uh, best way' is incorrect; 'the best way' is correct without 'for this'. 'Stop a moment when you are in this situation' is awkward; 'stop a moment in that situation' is better. Also, 'it is memorable' is better as 'it becomes memorable' to indicate the effect. Correcting prepositions and phrasing improves clarity and grammar.