写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit long and has some grammatical errors. Try to keep your answer concise and use correct tense. For example, use present tense if you still write a lot, or past tense if you don't. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

示例: Yes, I write a lot, especially at night because I feel comfortable then. When I was in grade 10, I had many assignments, so I wrote many essays and paragraphs.

建议: Your answer is unclear and has some awkward phrasing. Try to be more specific and clear about what you like to write and why. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I like to write free writing about religious places and temples because I am very familiar with them. This helps me write easily and in detail.

建议: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to organize your ideas logically and use correct grammar. Explain clearly how writing can change things or improve skills.

示例: Yes, writing can change my behavior because it helps me think carefully. Also, writing improves my handwriting and helps me express ideas clearly when speaking is difficult.

建议: Your answer is good but has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly.

示例: I prefer typing because it is faster and the computer corrects my spelling mistakes. However, I also like handwriting sometimes.

建议: Your answer is unclear and has many grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and clearly about how often you keep diaries. Avoid unnecessary details and improve sentence structure.

示例: I usually keep a diary every day as part of my routine. I write about my daily schedule and activities.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by using better linking words and clearer sentence structure. Try to avoid repetition and be more concise.

示例: I use digital photography and videos to record my life. They help me preserve memories that I can easily revisit and share with my friends and family.

× Yes, I write a lot when I was in grade 10 because at grade 10 there was too much assignment given by our teachers and I usually write at night, so at night I feel so comfortable and I write a lot of essays and paragraphs.

✓ Yes, I wrote a lot when I was in grade 10 because at grade 10 there were too many assignments given by our teachers and I usually wrote at night, so at night I felt so comfortable and I wrote a lot of essays and paragraphs.

The sentence refers to past events, so the verbs should be in the past tense. 'Write' should be 'wrote', 'is' should be 'was', and 'assignment' should be plural 'assignments' because it refers to multiple tasks. Also, 'was too much assignment' is incorrect; it should be 'were too many assignments' to agree in number.

× Yes, I write a lot when I was in grade 10 because at grade 10 there was too much assignment given by our teachers and I usually write at night, so at night I feel so comfortable and I write a lot of essays and paragraphs.

✓ Yes, I wrote a lot when I was in grade 10 because at grade 10 there were too many assignments given by our teachers and I usually wrote at night, so at night I felt so comfortable and I wrote a lot of essays and paragraphs.

'Assignment' is countable and should be plural 'assignments' when referring to multiple tasks. Also, 'too much' is used with uncountable nouns; for countable nouns like 'assignments', 'too many' is correct.

× I especially write about the free writing, especially about place religious temples or religious ornaments, because I'm too much familiar with them. So I can write about 250 to 2 or 300. I can write easily.

✓ I especially wrote free writing, especially about places like religious temples or religious ornaments, because I'm very familiar with them. So I can write about 250 to 300 words easily.

Since the context is past writing habits, 'write' should be 'wrote'. 'Place religious temples' is incorrect; it should be 'places like religious temples'. 'I'm too much familiar' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I'm very familiar'. The phrase 'I can write about 250 to 2 or 300' is unclear and corrected to 'about 250 to 300 words'.

× Yes, uh, while I writing, it will change some things in my behaviors when I will write some things about you.

✓ Yes, uh, while I am writing, it will change some things in my behavior when I write some things about you.

'While I writing' is incorrect; it should be 'while I am writing' using the present continuous tense. 'Behaviors' is usually uncountable in this context, so 'behavior' is correct. Also, 'when I will write' should be 'when I write' because future tense is not used after 'when' in this context.

× Uh, we can improve our handwriting to also.

✓ Uh, we can also improve our handwriting.

The phrase 'to also' is misplaced and incorrect. 'Also' should be placed before the verb 'improve' to correctly modify it.

× And if we can't speak, we can clarify on word.

✓ And if we can't speak, we can clarify a word.

'Clarify on word' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'clarify a word' without the preposition 'on'.

× I prefer both, but especially typing because when we write it takes 2 lots of time, but when we type it makes anything perfect as well as we can write speed and when we are not getting so good spelling the computer will automatically correct it.

✓ I prefer both, but especially typing because when we write it takes a lot of time, but when we type it makes everything perfect as well as we can write faster and when we do not have good spelling, the computer will automatically correct it.

'2 lots of time' is incorrect; it should be 'a lot of time'. 'Makes anything perfect' should be 'makes everything perfect'. 'Write speed' should be 'write faster' to indicate speed. 'Are not getting so good spelling' is incorrect; it should be 'do not have good spelling'.

× So I prefer writing in.

✓ So I prefer typing.

The phrase 'writing in' is incomplete and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'I prefer typing' as opposed to handwriting.

× Oh, usually I'm often to keep my dry as a daily routine because there is not schedule for me.

✓ Oh, usually I often keep my diary as a daily routine because there is no schedule for me.

'I'm often to keep' is incorrect; it should be 'I often keep'. 'My dry' is a misspelling of 'my diary'. 'There is not schedule' should be 'there is no schedule'.

× So I usually make always my schedule.

✓ So I usually always make my schedule.

The adverbs 'usually' and 'always' are misplaced. The correct order is 'usually always' or better 'always usually' depending on emphasis, but 'usually always' is more natural here.

× I wake up at that time, I will wake up at that, I will eat that time and I will go to school.

✓ I wake up at that time, I eat at that time, and I go to school.

The use of 'will' is incorrect when describing habitual actions or routines. Present simple tense should be used for routines.

× I will write special delivery.

✓ I will write a special diary entry.

'Special delivery' is incorrect in this context; likely the student meant 'special diary entry' or 'special entry'.

× I usually use digital photograph as a recording videos, taking photos which will keep my movement memories fresh.

✓ I usually use digital photographs and record videos, taking photos which keep my memories fresh.

'Use digital photograph as a recording videos' is incorrect. It should be 'use digital photographs and record videos'. 'Movement memories' is unclear; 'memories' is sufficient.

× Also taking photos and videos allows me to preserve memories, video which I can easily visit and revisit and share with my friends and families.

✓ Also, taking photos and videos allows me to preserve memories, which I can easily revisit and share with my friends and family.

The phrase 'video which I can easily visit and revisit' is incorrect. 'Visit' is not used with 'video' in this context. 'Families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's family group.