写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng các từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

示例: No, I don't write very often. Instead, I usually express my feelings by talking with my family, especially my mother, who often gives me advice about my problems.

建议: Bạn nên sắp xếp câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng từ vựng đa dạng và chính xác hơn để diễn đạt ý tưởng.

示例: I like to write diaries every day, as well as new vocabulary and advice I receive. This helps me overcome difficulties and challenges in my life, so writing is very helpful for me.

建议: Câu trả lời cần được diễn đạt rõ ràng và chính xác hơn. Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, tránh lỗi thì và dùng từ phù hợp. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu văn trôi chảy hơn.

示例: Yes, I believe what I write will change as I grow older and become more mature. My thoughts and feelings will evolve, so the content of my writing will reflect these changes.

建议: Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và chú ý ngữ pháp thì. Hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I prefer handwriting when I write because it allows me to express my emotions better than typing on a computer or smart device.

建议: Câu trả lời cần được hoàn chỉnh và rõ ràng hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc. Hãy diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách cụ thể và chính xác.

示例: I keep a diary twice a week, once on a weekday and once on the weekend. This helps me summarize my thoughts and feelings for the whole week.

建议: Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ vựng phù hợp. Hãy sắp xếp câu trả lời mạch lạc và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn tự nhiên hơn.

示例: I use various methods to record my life, such as taking notes on my smart devices. This is convenient and helps me keep track of my daily activities easily.

× Actually, I don't write a lot but then I just speak out with my family or especially my mother because I want to express my feelings and also my speaking by talking and my mom give me some bad talk about the situation that I have to.

✓ Actually, I don't write a lot but then I just speak out with my family, especially my mother, because I want to express my feelings and also practice my speaking by talking, and my mom gives me some advice about the situation that I have to face.

The verb 'give' should be in the third person singular form 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'my mom'. Also, 'bad talk' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'advice' is more appropriate. The phrase 'my speaking by talking' is awkward; 'practice my speaking by talking' is clearer.

× Every day I just want to write some Diaries or some vocabulary or some advice or tips that others give me in a daily basis that can help me to overcome the difficulty and challenges in my life.

✓ Every day I just want to write some diaries or some vocabulary or some advice or tips that others give me on a daily basis that can help me to overcome the difficulties and challenges in my life.

The word 'Diaries' should be lowercase 'diaries' as it is a common noun. 'In a daily basis' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'on a daily basis'. Also, 'difficulty' should be plural 'difficulties' to match 'challenges'.

× Yes, I think my things that I write would change because I'm become more mature and the age was the age is increase.

✓ Yes, I think the things that I write will change because I am becoming more mature and my age is increasing.

The phrase 'I'm become' is incorrect; it should be 'I am becoming' to indicate present continuous tense. 'The age was the age is increase' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'my age is increasing'.

× So my thinking and my feelings will be changed.

✓ So my thinking and my feelings will change.

The verb 'will be changed' is passive and awkward here; 'will change' is the correct active form to express future change.

× So the things that I write will be changed too according the feelings and equity that I have.

✓ So the things that I write will change too according to the feelings and equity that I have.

The phrase 'according the feelings' is missing the preposition 'to'; the correct phrase is 'according to the feelings'. Also, 'equity' seems incorrect in this context; possibly 'emotions' or 'experiences' is intended, but as per instruction, only grammar issues are corrected.

× I would refer handwriting when I were when I am writing like in conventional ways because it can reflect my my emotion more than I type in the computers or in smart devices, and handwriting can express my emotion and my feelings more than typing.

✓ I would prefer handwriting when I am writing in conventional ways because it can reflect my emotions more than when I type on computers or smart devices, and handwriting can express my emotions and my feelings more than typing.

The modal verb 'would refer' is incorrect; it should be 'would prefer'. 'When I were' is incorrect; it should be 'when I am'. 'My my emotion' is a repetition error; corrected to 'my emotions'. 'Type in the computers' should be 'type on computers'.

× I will keep Diaries twice a week because I think only the one on the weekday and the one on the weekends can conclude a total thinking and feelings and also emotion in the on week for my diary and so I can.

✓ I will keep diaries twice a week because I think only one on the weekday and one on the weekend can include all my thoughts, feelings, and emotions for the week in my diary.

'Diaries' should be lowercase 'diaries'. 'The one on the weekday and the one on the weekends' should be 'one on the weekday and one on the weekend' for consistency. 'Conclude a total thinking and feelings and also emotion' is awkward; 'include all my thoughts, feelings, and emotions' is clearer. 'In the on week' is incorrect; corrected to 'for the week'.

× I have used a lot of methods to record my life like take note in my smart devices because it is so convenient and helpful and easily to me for keep track with my daily life and also I can see them effectively when I look at my phones.

✓ I have used a lot of methods to record my life, like taking notes on my smart devices because it is so convenient, helpful, and easy for me to keep track of my daily life, and I can also see them effectively when I look at my phone.

'Take note' should be 'taking notes' to match the gerund form after 'like'. 'Easily to me' is incorrect; it should be 'easy for me'. 'Keep track with' should be 'keep track of'. 'Phones' should be singular 'phone' if referring to one device.