写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect naturalness. Also, avoid redundancy and keep answers concise. For example, "when hen writes and work was required" is unclear and likely a typo. Try to use linking words to improve coherence and correct minor mistakes.

示例: Not really. I don't write by hand often these days because most of my schoolwork is done on the computer. For example, we usually create Google Docs to type our assignments. However, I used to write a lot in middle school and during the high school entrance exam when handwritten work was required. My handwriting was good back then, but it has declined since I don't practice as much now.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and awkward expressions, such as "do works by writing" and "more nostalgia way." Try to use correct forms and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about why you find writing interesting or romantic.

示例: These days, I like to write diaries or keep a schedule of my daily life because I'm not required to write for school. I've found it interesting to pick up a pen and write spontaneously. Additionally, I sometimes write poetry on paper, which feels nostalgic and romantic to me.

建议: Your answer is relevant and structured well, but there are minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "focus more practical writing" and "writing would change within the time." Use linking words like "for instance" and correct grammar to improve clarity and naturalness.

示例: Of course, I believe the things I write will change at different stages of my life. For instance, in middle age, I might focus more on practical writing, such as keeping track of taxes or making shopping lists. However, right now, I enjoy writing school assignments and occasionally creating poetry or other creative pieces, which reflect my current interests and priorities. So, my writing will definitely change over time.

建议: Your answer contains some unclear and awkward phrases, such as "better things I'm not staring and scream." Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to contrast your preferences. Also, avoid run-on sentences and improve grammar for better coherence.

示例: To be honest, I prefer typing because it's more efficient and the autocorrect feature helps me avoid grammar mistakes. However, handwriting feels more nostalgic and helps me concentrate better since I'm not distracted by screens. I enjoy both methods depending on the situation, but mainly I type because handwriting is required less these days.

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "once every day" and "some Diaries and new thoughts updates." Try to use correct expressions and linking words to improve fluency and clarity.

示例: I used to keep a diary every day, but now I only write down important events or thoughts occasionally when I have time. As an international student, I often spend long hours at the airport between flights, and during that time, I usually update my diary and jot down new thoughts on my computer.

建议: Your answer covers various methods but has some awkward phrasing, such as "I would quote voice notes" and "the one that I found interesting." Try to use clearer expressions and linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, be more specific about how these methods help you record your life.

示例: I use several methods to record my daily life. For example, I often take pictures to capture special moments visually. I also write short sketches or notes to reflect on my experiences. Additionally, I record voice notes, and interestingly, I keep track of my life by reviewing chat histories with my friends as reminders.

× However, I used to write a lot in middle school and during the high school entrance exam when hen writes and work was required.

✓ However, I used to write a lot in middle school and during the high school entrance exam when writing and work were required.

The phrase 'hen writes and work was required' contains errors in verb form and agreement. 'Hen writes' is incorrect and should be 'writing' to correctly use the gerund form after 'when'. Also, 'work was required' should be 'work were required' to agree with the plural subject 'writing and work'. This correction ensures proper past tense and subject-verb agreement.

× I like to write Diaries or schedule of my daily life these days.

✓ I like to write diaries or schedules of my daily life these days.

The nouns 'Diaries' and 'schedule' are countable and should be in plural form when referring to multiple entries or items. Also, 'schedule' should be plural to match 'diaries' and the context. Capitalization of 'Diaries' is unnecessary unless it is a proper noun. Using plural forms correctly improves grammatical accuracy.

× Since I'm not required to do works by writing.

✓ Since I'm not required to do work by writing.

The noun 'work' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'works' in this context. Using 'work' correctly as an uncountable noun improves grammatical correctness.

× I've found it really interesting to pick up the pen and write something random.

✓ I've found it really interesting to pick up the pen and write something random.

No correction needed for this sentence as it does not contain errors related to pronouns or other listed grammar problems.

× Additionally, I do create some poetries myself on paper.

✓ Additionally, I do create some poetry myself on paper.

The noun 'poetry' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'poetries'. Using 'poetry' correctly as an uncountable noun improves grammatical accuracy.

× I think it's a more nostalgia way to do it and it's more romantic.

✓ I think it's a more nostalgic way to do it and it's more romantic.

The word 'nostalgia' is a noun, but an adjective 'nostalgic' is needed to describe 'way'. Using the correct adjective form improves sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× For example, in middle age I might focus more practical writing, such as keeping track of taxes or making shopping lists.

✓ For example, in middle age I might focus more on practical writing, such as keeping track of taxes or making shopping lists.

The phrase 'focus more practical writing' is missing the preposition 'on' which is necessary after 'focus'. Adding 'on' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× So writing would change within the time.

✓ So writing would change over time.

The phrase 'within the time' is incorrect in this context. The correct expression is 'over time' to indicate change occurring gradually. This correction improves naturalness and clarity.

× To be honest, I prefer typing because it's more efficient and the auto correct feature helps me avoid grammar mistakes.

✓ To be honest, I prefer typing because it's more efficient and the autocorrect feature helps me avoid grammar mistakes.

The term 'auto correct' should be combined into one word 'autocorrect' as it is a compound noun. This correction improves accuracy and reflects common usage.

× However, on the other hand, writing feels more nostalgic and allows me to concentrate better things I'm not staring and scream so I enjoy both methods.

✓ However, writing feels more nostalgic and allows me to concentrate better because I'm not staring at a screen and screaming, so I enjoy both methods.

The original sentence is confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'things I'm not staring and scream'. The correction clarifies the meaning by restructuring the sentence, adding missing prepositions, and correcting verb forms to improve coherence and grammatical correctness.

× Depends on the situation but mainly typing since these days handwriting is required less.

✓ It depends on the situation, but mainly I prefer typing since handwriting is required less these days.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'It' as the subject and 'I prefer' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence structure.

× I used to keep Diaries once every day, but now I just occasionally write down some important events or thoughts once I have time.

✓ I used to keep diaries every day, but now I just occasionally write down some important events or thoughts when I have time.

'Diaries' should be lowercase and plural as it refers to multiple entries. 'Once every day' is better expressed as 'every day'. Also, 'once I have time' is better replaced with 'when I have time' for naturalness.

× I usually keep some Diaries and new thoughts updates on my computer during that period of time.

✓ I usually keep some diaries and new thought updates on my computer during that period of time.

'Diaries' should be lowercase and plural. 'New thoughts updates' is awkward; 'new thought updates' is clearer and more natural. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× Additionally, I would quote voice notes, but the one that I found interesting is that I keep track of my life by viewing chat histories with my friend as a reminder.

✓ Additionally, I would record voice notes, but the one that I find interesting is that I keep track of my life by viewing chat histories with my friends as a reminder.

'Quote voice notes' is incorrect; 'record voice notes' is appropriate. 'Found' should be 'find' to maintain present tense consistency. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context of multiple chat histories. These corrections improve verb usage, tense consistency, and noun agreement.