写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and direct. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'escape through the gravity'. Use simple and clear language to express your ideas.

示例: Yes, I write quite often because it helps me relax and express my thoughts. Writing allows me to use my imagination freely, especially when I create stories about scientific topics.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and has repetition. Try to complete your thoughts and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to connect your ideas and explain why you like writing about astronomy.

示例: I like to write about astronomy because it is my favorite subject. Writing about space helps me escape from everyday life and explore fascinating ideas about the universe.

建议: Your answer has good content but some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer sentences. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

示例: I believe the things I write about will change because space is constantly expanding and new stars and planets are discovered. Therefore, my writing will evolve as we learn more about the universe.

建议: Your answer is understandable but has some repetition and awkward phrasing. Try to avoid repeating words and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about the disadvantages of handwriting.

示例: I prefer typing on my mobile or laptop because it is easier and more convenient. Typing allows me to edit and organize my ideas quickly, unlike handwriting which can be slower and harder to change.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains errors like 'pocket size body'. Try to use correct vocabulary and explain clearly how keeping a diary helps you. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

示例: I keep a small diary in my pocket every day. It helps me organize my tasks and stay productive by reminding me of what I need to do.

建议: Your answer has spelling mistakes and is unclear. Avoid repeating previous answers without adding new information. Use correct vocabulary and explain clearly how your mobile helps you record your life.

示例: Besides my diary, I use my mobile phone to record my life. It has many apps that help me stay organized and track my daily activities.

× Yes, I really love to write and which would really help me to relax my mind and sometimes help me to escape through the gravity.

✓ Yes, I really love to write, which really helps me to relax my mind and sometimes helps me to escape through gravity.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'and which' as a conjunction, causing confusion. The correct structure is to use a comma before 'which' to introduce a relative clause. Also, verb agreement is corrected to match singular subject 'which'.

× I don't have to write about the scientific characters according to my own imaginations.

✓ I like to write about scientific characters based on my own imagination.

The phrase 'according to my own imaginations' is incorrect. 'According to' is used for sources or authorities, not for personal imagination. 'Based on my own imagination' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'imaginations' should be singular 'imagination' as it is uncountable here.

× Well, as far as I see, I love to write about astronomy, which is my favorite subject and which is which helped me to escape the reality of this world and.

✓ Well, as far as I see, I love to write about astronomy, which is my favorite subject and has helped me to escape the reality of this world.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains redundant 'which is which'. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and completes the thought properly with correct verb tense 'has helped'.

× As you know, space is extremely diverse and out of our imaginations and it's increasing every single second and I think it will be changed in future by addition of different stars and planet.

✓ As you know, space is extremely diverse and beyond our imagination, and it's expanding every single second. I think it will change in the future by the addition of different stars and planets.

The phrase 'out of our imaginations' is better expressed as 'beyond our imagination'. 'It's increasing' is vague; 'it's expanding' fits better for space. 'Will be changed' is passive and awkward; 'will change' is active and correct. 'Planet' should be plural 'planets'. Also, 'in future' should be 'in the future'.

× Well I would prefer typing on mobile, on mobile or a laptop which is really easy and convenient for me.

✓ Well, I prefer typing on a mobile or a laptop, which is really easy and convenient for me.

'Would prefer' suggests conditional or hypothetical, but the context is general preference, so simple present 'prefer' is better. Also, 'on mobile' should be 'on a mobile'. Added comma after 'Well' for clarity.

× It's helped me to rewrite or create my ideas in mid of writing as compared to handwriting where you can't rewrite or it has some disadvantages also.

✓ It helps me to rewrite or create my ideas in the middle of writing, as compared to handwriting where you can't rewrite and it also has some disadvantages.

'It's helped' is past tense, but the context is general truth, so present tense 'It helps' is appropriate. 'In mid of writing' should be 'in the middle of writing'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct conjunction use.

× I love to keep a pocket size body in my pocket, which is really beneficial for me and play a significant role in my daily life.

✓ I love to keep a pocket-sized diary in my pocket, which is really beneficial for me and plays a significant role in my daily life.

'Pocket size body' is incorrect; the correct term is 'pocket-sized diary'. 'Play' should be 'plays' to agree with singular subject 'which'.

× It's helped me to finish my task on time and stay productive.

✓ It helps me to finish my tasks on time and stay productive.

'It's helped' is past tense, but the context suggests ongoing benefit, so present tense 'It helps' is better. 'Task' should be plural 'tasks' to indicate multiple tasks.

× As I mentioned in my previous answer I love to keep daddy and second one is my mobile which has multiple app to stay productive and track my daily life routine.

✓ As I mentioned in my previous answer, I love to keep a diary and the second one is my mobile, which has multiple apps to stay productive and track my daily routine.

'Daddy' is a wrong word here; it should be 'diary'. Added missing articles 'a' and 'the'. 'App' should be plural 'apps'. Added commas for clarity. 'Daily life routine' is better as 'daily routine'.