写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如'relaxable'应为'relaxing'，'writing is a method to express people's emotional and relax'表达不清晰。建议注意语法和词汇的准确使用，避免重复和冗余。

示例: Yes, I write quite often because I find it very relaxing, especially when I have a lot of free time. Writing helps me express my emotions and thoughts. For example, I like to write poetry when I see a beautiful sky.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰，如'waiting shop works'不明白意思，句子结构混乱。建议简洁明了地表达观点，使用恰当的词汇和句型。

示例: I enjoy writing poetry because it allows me to capture my feelings in a meaningful way. For instance, when I see a beautiful landscape like a sky or river, I write short poems describing the scene and my emotions.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，如'is easy to change'应为'can change easily'，'depend'应为'depends'，表达不连贯。建议加强语法基础，注意主谓一致和时态。

示例: Yes, I believe what I write changes often because it depends on my current emotions. For example, when I feel sad, I tend to write about negative things, but when I am happy, my writing reflects positive feelings.

建议: 回答表达基本清楚，但有些句子结构不够自然，如'if I use typing'应为'if I type'，'I waste my time writing'表达不准确。建议使用更自然的表达方式。

示例: I prefer typing to handwriting because I can write anytime and anywhere using a computer or phone. Handwriting requires pen and paper, which might cause me to miss important moments or waste time.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，如'recording'应为'record'，'enhance my interests of writing'表达不自然。建议注意动词形式和更地道的表达。

示例: I keep a diary every day because I find it meaningful to record my life experiences and emotions. Also, keeping a diary helps me improve my writing skills and maintain my interest in writing.

建议: 回答重复且句子结构混乱，缺少连贯性。建议避免重复，使用连接词使表达更流畅，并注意语法正确。

示例: Besides keeping a diary, I sometimes take photos or make voice recordings to capture my daily life. These methods help me remember important moments and reflect on my personal growth.

× I find this writing is very relaxable especially for a long time.

✓ I find writing very relaxing, especially for a long time.

这里“writing”作为动名词使用，后面应接形容词“relaxing”来表达“令人放松的”，而不是“relaxable”，后者不是正确的形容词形式。

× Writing is a method to express people's emotional and relax.

✓ Writing is a method to express people's emotions and relax.

“emotional”应为名词复数“emotions”，表示“情感”；“relax”应改为动名词“relaxing”或保持原句结构改为“to relax”，这里保持“relax”作为动词不正确。

× For example, I will writing when I saw a beautiful sky and maybe I will write some poetry.

✓ For example, I will write when I see a beautiful sky and maybe I will write some poetry.

“will writing”错误，助动词“will”后应接动词原形“write”；“saw”是过去式，与将来时“will”不搭配，应改为现在时“see”。

× I really like to write poetry because I think this is the way waiting shop works but still meaningful.

✓ I really like to write poetry because I think this is the way writing shop works but is still meaningful.

“waiting shop”应为“writing shop”，这里是拼写错误；“but still meaningful”缺少谓语动词，应加“is”。

× For example, when I saw a beautiful landscape like sky or river, I would write and write the environments and my emotion in a short words but still can experience my emotion.

✓ For example, when I see a beautiful landscape like the sky or river, I would write about the environment and my emotions in a few words but still convey my feelings.

“saw”应改为现在时“see”，因为是假设或习惯；“environments”应为不可数名词“environment”；“emotion”应为复数“emotions”；“in a short words”应为“in a few words”；“can experience my emotion”表达不清，改为“convey my feelings”更合适。

× My world is always depend on my emotion at the moment.

✓ My world always depends on my emotions at the moment.

主语“My world”是单数，谓语动词应加-s变为“depends”；“emotion”应为复数“emotions”，表示多种情绪。

× For example I would write some bad thing when I am sad mood or I write some happy thing when I am a happy woman.

✓ For example, I would write some bad things when I am in a sad mood or I write some happy things when I am happy.

“thing”应为复数“things”；“sad mood”前应加介词“in”；“a happy woman”与上下文不符，改为“happy”形容词即可。

× I prefer typing rather than handwriting when I am writing.

✓ I prefer typing to handwriting when I am writing.

“prefer”后应接“to”而非“rather than”，正确表达是“prefer A to B”。

× This is because I can write anywhere and any time if I use typing.

✓ This is because I can write anywhere and anytime if I use typing.

“any time”应合并为副词“anytime”，表示“任何时候”。

× Otherwise, if I use handwriting, maybe I will miss some important moments and I need to use pen and paper so I waste my time writing.

✓ Otherwise, if I use handwriting, maybe I will miss some important moments and I need to use a pen and paper, so I waste my time writing.

“use pen and paper”前应加不定冠词“a”，表示“一支笔和一张纸”；句子中缺少逗号，连接两个分句。

× I keep Diaries every day because I find this is meaningful for me to recording my experience of life and my emotion everyday and also I can enhance my interests of writing if I keep Diaries.

✓ I keep a diary every day because I find it meaningful for me to record my life experiences and my emotions every day, and also I can enhance my interest in writing if I keep a diary.

“Diaries”复数不符合习惯用法，通常用单数“a diary”；“to recording”应为不定式“to record”；“experience”应为复数“experiences”；“emotion”应为复数“emotions”；“interests of writing”应为“interest in writing”。

× I usually use diary to record my life because I find diary is useful to record my experience and emotion everyday and I also keep Diaries can improve my writing skills and my interests of writing and also I can record myself growth.

✓ I usually use a diary to record my life because I find a diary is useful to record my experiences and emotions every day, and keeping a diary can improve my writing skills and my interest in writing, and also I can record my growth.

“use diary”前应加冠词“a”；“experience”和“emotion”应为复数；“keep Diaries”应改为“keeping a diary”；“interests of writing”应为“interest in writing”；“myself growth”应为“my growth”。