写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“usually to write”应为“usually write”，且“keep my silent”表达不准确。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，使用更自然的表达方式。

示例: Yes, I write quite often. At school, I usually write assignments for my teachers, and in my daily life, I keep a diary to reflect on my day and clear my mind.

建议: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，如“know towards my days”不清楚，句子连接不流畅。建议使用连词使句子更连贯，并用具体例子说明写日记的好处。

示例: I like to write diaries every day because it helps me express my feelings and reflect on my experiences. For example, I can freely write about what happened during the day and how I felt.

建议: 回答表达了观点，但句子结构不够清晰，时态使用不准确。建议注意时态一致，使用连接词使表达更流畅，并具体说明写作变化的方面。

示例: Yes, my writing has changed a lot. As I grow older, my writing skills improve, and I learn new vocabulary, which helps me express my ideas more clearly and creatively.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，如“prefer to handwriting”应为“prefer handwriting”，句子较长且缺少连词。建议简化句子，使用连词连接观点，使表达更自然。

示例: I prefer handwriting because when I write by hand, I feel more connected to my thoughts. Also, I remember things better this way, and I'm not very good at typing.

建议: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱。建议使用简单句和连词，避免重复，表达更清晰具体。

示例: I keep a diary almost every day. Writing about my day and feelings helps me feel better, especially when I can't share them with others. It also helps me remember past events.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，如“One of method”应为“One method”，表达不够自然。建议简化句子，使用正确的语法结构，并具体说明写日记的好处。

示例: One method I like is writing in my diary at night. I find my memory is clearer then, and writing helps me feel relaxed before I sleep.

× At school I usually to write something as my assignment to my teacher, but in my daily life I also write some Diaries to reflect my day and also it's a good way to maintain clarity or keep my silent.

✓ At school I usually write something as my assignment to my teacher, but in my daily life I also write some diaries to reflect my day and also it's a good way to maintain clarity or keep my silence.

句中“usually to write”中“to write”是不正确的动词形式，应该用动词原形“write”来表示习惯动作。此外，“silent”应改为名词“silence”，因为这里表示“保持安静”的状态。

× I also write some Diaries to reflect my day and also it's a good way to maintain clarity or keep my silent.

✓ I also write some diaries to reflect my day and also it's a good way to maintain clarity or keep my silence.

“silent”是形容词，不能用作名词，正确的名词形式是“silence”，表示“安静”或“沉默”的状态。

× I'd like to write some Diaries in my daily life because I think its a good way to express myself.

✓ I'd like to write some diaries in my daily life because I think it's a good way to express myself.

“its”是物主代词，表示“它的”，但此处应使用“it's”，是“it is”的缩写，表示“这是”。

× I can know towards my days and reflect myself, my thoughts in my diary and I also pay attention to what happening today I can express freely.

✓ I can understand my days and reflect on myself, my thoughts in my diary and I also pay attention to what is happening today so I can express freely.

“know towards”用法错误，应改为“understand”；“reflect myself”应为“reflect on myself”，动词reflect后需加介词on；“what happening”缺少be动词，应为“what is happening”。

× All my writing changed a lot.

✓ All my writing has changed a lot.

此处描述的是从过去到现在的变化，应该使用现在完成时“has changed”而非一般过去时“changed”。

× I think as I grew older my writing ability will be better and my experience will improve a lot significantly.

✓ I think as I grow older my writing ability will be better and my experience will improve a lot significantly.

“as I grew older”使用了过去时，和后面的将来时“will be”时态不一致，应改为现在时“as I grow older”。

× With many kind of new words I studied, I expressed in my writing also more clearly and creatively.

✓ With many kinds of new words I have studied, I express myself in my writing more clearly and creatively.

“many kind”应为复数形式“many kinds”；“I studied”应使用现在完成时“have studied”表示过去到现在的经历；“I expressed”时态不对，应为现在时“express”。

× I prefer to handwriting As for me if I writing something by myself, I can feel that my thinking is closer with my writing and also something I write by my hand, I can remember it better.

✓ I prefer handwriting. As for me, if I write something by myself, I can feel that my thinking is closer to my writing and also something I write by hand, I can remember it better.

“prefer to handwriting”中“to”不应出现，正确用法是“prefer handwriting”；“if I writing”应为“if I write”；“closer with”应为“closer to”；“by my hand”应为“by hand”。

× Also I'm not good at typing so I prefer to writing something by hand.

✓ Also I'm not good at typing so I prefer writing something by hand.

“prefer to writing”结构错误，动词prefer后直接加动名词“writing”即可，不需要“to”。

× I keep Diaries almost every day.

✓ I keep diaries almost every day.

“Diaries”作为普通名词不需要大写，且保持小写即可。

× I love to write something about my day and also express my mood, my feeling on my Diaries.

✓ I love to write something about my day and also express my mood, my feelings in my diaries.

“feeling”应为复数“feelings”，表示多种感受；“on my Diaries”应为“in my diaries”，表示内容写在日记里。

× Like it can make me feel better if I have something didn't say with other and I can't say with other I can write on it.

✓ Like it can make me feel better if I have something I didn't say to others and I can't say to others I can write it down.

“didn't say with other”用法错误，应为“didn't say to others”；“say with other”应为“say to others”；“write on it”应为“write it down”。

× Also it can make me remember the things I happened in the past.

✓ Also it can help me remember the things that happened in the past.

“the things I happened”结构错误，应为“the things that happened”；“make me remember”改为“help me remember”更自然。

× One of method that I think really great is that I like to write my Diaries at night because I found that my memory, my memories will be best at night and it can make me feel better before I go to bed.

✓ One of the methods that I think is really great is that I like to write my diaries at night because I found that my memory, my memories, are best at night and it can make me feel better before I go to bed.

“One of method”应为“One of the methods”；“Diaries”应小写；“memory, my memories will be best”主谓不一致，应为“memories are best”。

× My feelings will be express into the diary.

✓ My feelings will be expressed in the diary.

“will be express”缺少过去分词，应为“will be expressed”；“into the diary”应为“in the diary”。