写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“for sometimes”应为“sometimes”，以及“have a lot comment to say”表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免重复和语法错误，使表达更自然流畅。

示例: No, I don't write very often. I usually write short articles online when I watch an amazing film or read an interesting book.

建议: 回答中“viewings”用词不当，应使用“thoughts”或“feelings”。句子未完整，且缺少连接词，导致表达不连贯。建议使用恰当词汇并用连接词使句子更完整。

示例: I like to write diary entries about my feelings when something touches me in daily life. Also, I write short articles after reading something interesting or moving.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，如“no cons to right”应为“no cons to writing”，且表达不够清晰。建议注意语法正确性，使用更准确的词汇，并简洁表达观点。

示例: Yes, I think what I write changes over time. Writing helps me remember things and reflects how I grow and change in life.

建议: 回答表达基本清楚，但“typing about my comments”不够自然，且句子结构略显重复。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并适当使用连接词使句子更流畅。

示例: I prefer typing because it's convenient to write anytime on my smartphone. Handwriting is less convenient for me nowadays.

× No, I only write for sometimes, especially when I have read a stunning film or an interesting book.

✓ No, I only write sometimes, especially when I have read a stunning film or an interesting book.

这里的 'for sometimes' 是错误的用法，'sometimes' 本身是副词，不需要加介词 'for'。应直接使用 'sometimes'。

× But I will have a lot comment to say umm, I will write some short art articles and post it on the Internet.

✓ But I will have a lot of comments to say, umm, I will write some short art articles and post them on the Internet.

'a lot comment' 应为 'a lot of comments'，因为 'comment' 需要复数形式且前面要加 'a lot of'。'post it' 中的 'it' 应指代复数 'articles'，应改为 'them'。

× No, I only write for sometimes, especially when I have read a stunning film or an interesting book.

✓ No, I only write sometimes, especially when I have read a stunning film or an interesting book.

'for sometimes' 中的介词 'for' 使用错误，'sometimes' 是副词，不需要介词修饰。

× But I will have a lot comment to say umm, I will write some short art articles and post it on the Internet.

✓ But I will have a lot of comments to say, umm, I will write some short art articles and post them on the Internet.

'post it' 中的代词 'it' 指代复数 'articles'，应使用复数代词 'them'。

× Oh, actually, I like to write some of my viewings as a diary when I have been touched by something in my daily life.

✓ Oh, actually, I like to write some of my views as a diary when I have been touched by something in my daily life.

'viewings' 用法不当，应使用 'views' 表示观点。

× On the other hand, I will also write a short article after I've read something moving, interesting or.

✓ On the other hand, I will also write a short article after I've read something moving or interesting.

句子末尾 'interesting or.' 不完整，缺少并列成分，应调整为 'moving or interesting'。

× Yes, and I consider changing is not a bad or terrible thing.

✓ Yes, and I consider change is not a bad or terrible thing.

'changing' 是动名词形式，语境中应使用名词 'change'。

× There is no cons to right because it keeps a good habit of remembers or recording something and it will change because we are growing up through this process of our life.

✓ There are no cons to writing because it keeps a good habit of remembering or recording something, and it will change because we are growing up through this process of our life.

'cons' 是复数，谓语应用 'are'；'right' 应为动名词 'writing'；'remembers' 应为动名词 'remembering'。

× There is no cons to right because it keeps a good habit of remembers or recording something and it will change because we are growing up through this process of our life.

✓ There are no cons to writing because it keeps a good habit of remembering or recording something, and it will change because we are growing up through this process of our life.

'cons to right' 中 'to' 用法不当，正确搭配是 'cons to writing'。

× I've been accustomed to typing about my comments, so it is convenient for me to write anytime I have something to say because my smartphone is just in hand.

✓ I've been accustomed to typing my comments, so it is convenient for me to write anytime I have something to say because my smartphone is just in my hand.

'typing about my comments' 中 'about' 不必要，应直接说 'typing my comments'；'just in hand' 应为 'just in my hand'，需要物主代词。