写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中有语法错误和重复词汇，表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免重复，并注意语法正确。

示例: Yes, I write quite a lot because I need to complete assignments for school. Whenever the school gives me assessments, I make sure to finish them on time.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，建议使用完整句子并清晰表达观点，同时避免重复。

示例: I like writing simple poems because it is a creative way to express my feelings. Although sometimes I feel embarrassed when I read my old poems, I still enjoy writing them.

建议: 回答中有严重语法和表达错误，建议练习正确的句子结构，清晰表达观点，并避免词汇错误。

示例: I definitely think what I write will change over time because my perspective on things changes as I grow.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议简化句子结构，明确表达偏好，并注意语法正确。

示例: It depends on what I am writing. For assignments, I prefer typing on my computer. But for poems, I like to write them by hand.

× Is the right in here?

✓ Is this right here?

句子结构错误，原句中缺少主语和正确的疑问结构，应该使用 'Is this right here?' 来表达“这里对吗？”

× Is is a simple action?

✓ Is it a simple action?

句子结构错误，重复使用了 'is'，应改为 'Is it a simple action?'，使句子完整且符合疑问句结构。

× I quite write a lot because I have to accomplish my assignment for for my school.

✓ I quite write a lot because I have to accomplish my assignments for my school.

名词复数形式错误，'assignment' 应为复数 'assignments'，因为通常有多个作业。

× So every time the school gave me assessment and I tried it.

✓ So every time the school gives me assessments, I try them.

时态和介词使用错误，'gave' 应为现在时 'gives'，'assessment' 应为复数 'assessments'，且 'try it' 应改为 'try them' 以对应复数。

× I like white simple poems, it's a creative way to express my feeling.

✓ I like writing simple poems; it's a creative way to express my feelings.

单词拼写错误，'white' 应为 'write'，'feeling' 应为复数 'feelings'，且句子结构需调整以表达清晰。

× Although every time I look back, looked back the past poems, I feel a little bit embarrassed and I think it's a little bit silly, but I.

✓ Although every time I look back at past poems, I feel a little embarrassed and think they're a little silly.

时态混用错误，'looked back' 应为现在时 'look back'，且缺少介词 'at'，句子结尾不完整需修正。

× I definitely think the thing I write will change with.

✓ I definitely think the things I write will change.

单复数错误，'thing' 应为复数 'things'，以匹配后文语境。

× I am eating the perspective of of same thing.

✓ I am seeing the perspective of the same thing.

单词拼写错误，'eating' 应为 'seeing'，且重复 'of' 应去掉一个，'the same thing' 前需加定冠词。

× Well have a conversion so it's always changing.

✓ Well, have a conversation, so it's always changing.

单词拼写错误，'conversion' 应为 'conversation'，且句子缺少逗号分隔，影响理解。

× It all depends on what am I right for.

✓ It all depends on what I am writing for.

疑问句语序错误，应为陈述句语序 'what I am writing for'，且 'right' 应为 'writing'。

× If I come I I'm completing the the assignments, I definitely want to type it on my computer when it's come.

✓ If I am completing the assignments, I definitely want to type them on my computer when it comes.

句子结构混乱，重复词语 'come'，时态和代词使用错误，需调整为正确的陈述句。

× When we talk about the poems, I rather to write down.

✓ When we talk about poems, I prefer to write them down.

动词搭配错误，'rather to write down' 应为 'prefer to write them down'，且 'the poems' 改为泛指 'poems' 更合适。