写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và trả lời đúng trọng tâm, nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ chưa chính xác (ví dụ: 'a short stories' nên là 'short stories', 'keep journal' nên là 'keep a journal'). Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng danh từ số nhiều và mạo từ đúng cách để câu trả lời chính xác hơn.

示例: Yes, I write a lot because it's part of my studies. Additionally, I also compose short stories or keep a journal every day because it helps me express my thoughts.

建议: Bạn cần cải thiện cách dùng từ và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, 'express my talks' không phù hợp, nên dùng 'express my thoughts' hoặc 'feelings'. Ngoài ra, 'share the experience personal' nên là 'share personal experiences'. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I love writing a journal because I can express my thoughts and share personal experiences. Moreover, I enjoy writing short stories because they make me feel more creative.

建议: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác, gây khó hiểu. Ví dụ, 'the my experience is a difference' nên là 'my experiences will be different'. 'put pen to paper some new things like carrier' không rõ nghĩa, nên dùng 'write about new things like my career'. Hãy luyện tập cách diễn đạt ý tưởng rõ ràng và chính xác hơn.

示例: Yes, I think the things I write will change as I grow older and my experiences become different. In the future, I will write about new topics like my career.

建议: Bạn đã đưa ra hai ý rất tốt nhưng câu trả lời hơi lặp từ và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Ví dụ, 'in a long long distance' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này. Bạn nên dùng 'when I need to write quickly' hoặc 'for long texts'. Ngoài ra, 'choose writing my hand' nên là 'prefer handwriting'. Hãy luyện tập sử dụng từ nối và cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn.

示例: I prefer typing because it's faster and more efficient, especially when I need to write long texts. However, I also like handwriting because it makes me feel more creative and helps me remember information better.

× Additionally, I also compose a short stories or keep journal every day because it makes me express my thoughts.

✓ Additionally, I also compose short stories or keep a journal every day because it helps me express my thoughts.

The phrase 'a short stories' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'stories'. It should be either 'a short story' or 'short stories' without 'a'. Also, 'keep journal' needs an article 'a' before 'journal'. Using 'helps me express' is more natural than 'makes me express'.

× For me, I love writing the journal because I can express my talks and share the experience personal.

✓ For me, I love writing the journal because I can express my thoughts and share personal experiences.

'Express my talks' is incorrect; 'talks' is plural and not the right word here; 'thoughts' is appropriate. 'Share the experience personal' is incorrect; it should be 'share personal experiences' to be plural and adjective before noun.

× What's more, I choose a short stories because it makes me feel more.

✓ What's more, I choose short stories because they make me feel more.

'A short stories' is incorrect because 'a' is singular and 'stories' is plural. It should be 'short stories' without 'a'. Also, 'it makes' should be 'they make' to agree with plural 'stories'.

× Oh yes, of course, because I grow up older and the my experience is a difference.

✓ Oh yes, of course, because I grow older and my experiences are different.

'Grow up older' is incorrect; 'grow older' is correct. 'The my experience' is wrong; 'my experiences' is correct plural form. 'Is a difference' should be 'are different' to agree with plural 'experiences'.

× So I think in in the future I would put pen to paper some new things like carrier.

✓ So I think in the future I will put pen to paper some new things like a career.

'Would' is conditional; 'will' is better for future prediction. 'Carrier' is a misspelling; correct word is 'career'. Also, 'put pen to paper' is an idiom meaning to write.

× Oh I I prefer typing because it's it's faster and more efficient, especially in a long long distance.

✓ Oh, I prefer typing because it's faster and more efficient, especially over long distances.

'In a long long distance' is incorrect preposition usage; 'over long distances' is correct. Also, repeated words 'I I' and 'it's it's' should be corrected to single instances.

× Moreover, I choose writing my hand because it makes me feel more creative and remember information better.

✓ Moreover, I choose writing by hand because it makes me feel more creative and helps me remember information better.

'Writing my hand' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'writing by hand'. Also, 'remember information better' needs 'helps me' to be grammatically correct.