写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevabınız doğal ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. "I write diary" yerine "I keep a diary" demek daha doğru olur. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha akıcı yapmak için gereksiz tekrarları azaltmalısınız.

示例: Yes, I keep a diary every day at the end of the day. It helps me clear my mind and relax, so I write quite a lot daily.

建议: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi ve yapı hataları mevcut. "I was writing stories like that's a really childish stories" ifadesi yerine daha doğru ve doğal bir yapı kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cevaplarınızı daha net ve akıcı hale getirmek için cümlelerinizi sadeleştirin ve bağlaçlar kullanın.

示例: When I was a child, I used to write simple stories. However, now I keep a diary where I write about my day and how it went.

建议: Cevabınız iyi ancak "world naturally evolve" ifadesinde bir hata var, doğrusu "would naturally evolve" olmalı. Ayrıca, "TOEFL pieces" ifadesi biraz belirsiz; ne tür yazılar olduğunu daha açık belirtmelisiniz.

示例: Yes, I believe that the things I write will change over time as I gain more knowledge and experience. My writing style and the topics I choose to write about would naturally evolve. For example, when I was younger, I mostly wrote simple stories, but now I prefer more complex essays related to TOEFL preparation.

建议: Cümlenizde tekrarlar ve gereksiz kelimeler var. "Like I can, I can write easier and I can write like faster" ifadesi yerine daha akıcı ve doğru bir yapı kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, neden tercih ettiğinizi daha detaylı açıklayabilirsiniz.

示例: I prefer typing because it is more comfortable and faster than handwriting. It allows me to write more easily and efficiently.

× I write diary every day, every end of the day and it helps me clear my mind and it relaxed me.

✓ I write a diary every day, at the end of the day, and it helps me clear my mind and relaxes me.

The noun 'diary' is countable and requires an article 'a' when singular. Also, 'every end of the day' is incorrect; it should be 'at the end of the day' to indicate time. The verb 'relaxed' should be in present tense 'relaxes' to agree with 'it' and maintain tense consistency.

× When I was a child, I I was writing stories like that's a really childish stories.

✓ When I was a child, I used to write stories like those really childish stories.

The phrase 'I was writing' is awkward here; 'used to write' better expresses habitual past action. 'That's a really childish stories' is incorrect because 'that's' is singular and 'stories' is plural; it should be 'those really childish stories'.

× But my writing history is starting with this.

✓ But my writing history started with this.

The phrase 'is starting' is present continuous, which is inappropriate for past events; 'started' is the correct past tense. 'Writing history' is acceptable but 'history of my writing' might be clearer.

× Now I just keep diary.

✓ Now I just keep a diary.

'Diary' is a countable noun and requires the article 'a'. 'Keep diary' is incorrect without the article.

× Like I just writing about my day, how it went.

✓ Like I am just writing about my day, how it went.

The verb 'writing' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense 'I am just writing'.

× My writing style and the topics I choose to write about world naturally evolve.

✓ My writing style and the topics I choose to write about will naturally evolve.

The word 'world' is a typo and should be 'will' to indicate future tense. 'Will naturally evolve' correctly expresses future change.

× For example, when I was younger I mostly wrote simple stories, but now I prefer more complex and TOEFL pieces.

✓ For example, when I was younger, I mostly wrote simple stories, but now I prefer more complex and TOEFL pieces.

A comma is needed after 'younger' for correct sentence structure. The rest is correct.

× Like I can, I can write easier and I can write like faster than handwriting.

✓ Like, I can write more easily and faster than handwriting.

'Easier' is an adjective; the adverb form 'more easily' is needed to modify the verb 'write'. Also, 'like' before 'faster' is unnecessary and should be removed.