写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时时态混乱，表达不够自然，且句子结构不完整。建议使用正确的时态，简洁明了地表达喜欢写作的内容，并避免语法错误。

示例: Yes, I enjoy writing short stories about family members. I find it very enjoyable to explore their relationships and emotions through my writing.

建议: 回答内容不连贯，表达不清晰，且有语法错误。建议明确说明喜欢写什么类型的作品，并用连贯的句子表达原因。

示例: I like to write emotional stories that highlight people's feelings. Whether it's happiness or sadness, I believe expressing these emotions makes my writing meaningful.

建议: 表达有些笨拙，语法和词汇使用不够准确。建议使用更自然的表达方式，清晰说明观点并使用连接词。

示例: Yes, as I grow older, my perspective on the world and society will change. Therefore, I plan to use my writing to reflect the realities I observe.

建议: 句子结构混乱，语法错误较多。建议简洁表达偏好，并说明原因，注意时态和主谓一致。

示例: I prefer handwriting because I find that more ideas come to me when I write on paper. Also, my typing skills are not very good yet.

× Well, in the last semester of my high school, I like to write some short novels about the family member of people, and I think it's very enjoyable to write about it.

✓ Well, in the last semester of my high school, I liked to write some short novels about the family members of people, and I thought it was very enjoyable to write about them.

这里时态使用错误，描述过去的事情应使用过去时态。'like'应改为'liked'，'think'应改为'thought'，'family member'应为复数形式'family members'，'it'指代不明确，应改为'them'指代复数的'family members'。

× Well, in the last semester of my high school, I like to write some short novels about the family member of people, and I think it's very enjoyable to write about it.

✓ Well, in the last semester of my high school, I liked to write some short novels about people's family members, and I thought it was very enjoyable to write about them.

介词使用不当，'about the family member of people'表达不自然，应改为'about people's family members'，更符合英语表达习惯。

× Well, in the last semester of my high school, I like to write some short novels about the family member of people, and I think it's very enjoyable to write about it.

✓ Well, in the last semester of my high school, I liked to write some short novels about people's family members, and I thought it was very enjoyable to write about them.

代词使用错误，'it'指代复数名词应使用'them'。

× I like to buy some short novels about.

✓ I like to read some short novels.

介词使用错误，'buy some short novels about'不完整且不合适，应改为'I like to read some short novels'。

× Some emotional stories and anything can emphasize people's emotions.

✓ I like some emotional stories and anything that can emphasize people's emotions.

句子结构不完整，缺少主语，应补充主语'I like'，并用关系代词'that'连接定语从句。

× Whatever the happiness and enjoy for all the sadness, if people will have these feelings, it makes me feel successful.

✓ Whether happiness or sadness, if people have these feelings, it makes me feel successful.

连词使用错误，'Whatever the happiness and enjoy for all the sadness'表达不清，应改为'Whether happiness or sadness'，更符合英语表达习惯。

× Whatever the happiness and enjoy for all the sadness, if people will have these feelings, it makes me feel successful.

✓ Whether happiness or sadness, if people have these feelings, it makes me feel successful.

情态动词使用错误，'will have'在条件句中不合适，应使用一般现在时'have'。

× Of course, with the age growing, the perspective of me to the world and society will change, so I will use writing as a method to show some reality of the world.

✓ Of course, as I grow older, my perspective on the world and society will change, so I will use writing as a method to show some realities of the world.

时态和表达不自然，'with the age growing'应改为'as I grow older'，'the perspective of me to the world'应改为'my perspective on the world'，'some reality'应为复数'some realities'。

× Of course, with the age growing, the perspective of me to the world and society will change, so I will use writing as a method to show some reality of the world.

✓ Of course, as I grow older, my perspective on the world and society will change, so I will use writing as a method to show some realities of the world.

介词使用错误，'perspective of me to the world'应改为'my perspective on the world'。

× I think I prefer handwriting because when I writing stories on papers there's more ideas came out and of course another way that my typing skills is not so mature.

✓ I think I prefer handwriting because when I write stories on paper, more ideas come out, and of course, another reason is that my typing skills are not very good yet.

时态错误，'when I writing'应为'when I write'，'there's more ideas came out'时态混乱，应为'more ideas come out'，'my typing skills is'主谓不一致，应为'my typing skills are'。