写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时应更直接回应问题，避免偏题。可以简洁说明写作频率，并用连接词组织句子，使表达更自然流畅。

示例: I don't write very often because I prefer physical activities. For example, I enjoy cycling, swimming, and badminton, which I usually do outdoors with my friends.

建议: 回答中应注意语法和用词准确，避免重复。可以用连接词丰富内容，使表达更连贯。

示例: When I was a child, I enjoyed writing my own stories because it was fun and memorable. Looking back, those stories remind me of my creativity at that time.

建议: 回答应更清晰，避免重复和语法错误。使用连接词使句子更连贯，并具体说明写作内容如何变化。

示例: Yes, I believe my writing changes daily because I get inspired by different experiences. For instance, visiting the beach today gave me new ideas for my stories.

建议: 回答应注意语法和句子结构，避免重复。可以用连接词连接观点，使表达更自然。

示例: I definitely prefer handwriting because I type slowly. Moreover, handwritten letters to friends and family convey emotions better than typed messages.

× However I am a big fan of doing sports for example like cycling, swimming, badminton.

✓ However, I am a big fan of sports, for example, cycling, swimming, and badminton.

这里'doing sports'用法不正确，通常说'be a fan of sports'，sports作为名词，不需要动词doing。建议直接用'sports'，并列举具体运动时用逗号分隔。

× Usually I go to some outdoor activities with my friends and have a great time there.

✓ Usually, I take part in some outdoor activities with my friends and have a great time there.

'go to some outdoor activities'表达不自然，应该用'take part in'或'join'来表示参加活动。

× When I was a kid, I usually write or create some stories by my own.

✓ When I was a kid, I usually wrote or created some stories on my own.

句子描述过去的习惯动作，动词应使用过去时态。'by my own'应改为'on my own'。

× When I was a kid, I usually write or create some stories by my own.

✓ When I was a kid, I usually wrote or created some stories on my own.

'by my own'是错误的搭配，正确表达是'on my own'，表示独自完成某事。

× I think it is quite funny and it's really a quite memorable experience.

✓ I think it is quite funny and it's really a memorable experience.

'a quite memorable'中'adverb quite'不应与不定冠词'a'连用，应该去掉'quite'或改为'adverb + adjective'结构。

× And now if I look back the stories I wrote in the past, it's really quite marked.

✓ And now if I look back at the stories I wrote in the past, they are really quite memorable.

'look back the stories'缺少介词'at'，'marked'用词不当，应使用'memorable'表示难忘的。

× Yes, I think each day I would also change because like in each day, in every day my brain will be inspired by different kinds of things.

✓ Yes, I think each day I also change because every day my brain is inspired by different kinds of things.

描述习惯性事实时应使用一般现在时，'would also change'不合适。

× Like for example, today I go to the beach and looking around and I would get some inspirations from different kind of.

✓ For example, today I went to the beach and looked around, and I got some inspiration from different kinds of things.

时态应统一为过去时，'looking around'应改为'looked around'，'different kind of'应为'different kinds of things'。

× Like for example, today I go to the beach and looking around and I would get some inspirations from different kind of.

✓ For example, today I went to the beach and looked around, and I got some inspiration from different kinds of things.

描述过去发生的事情，动词应使用过去时态。

× Handwriting letters to our friends and family I think is really cannot compared with typing.

✓ Handwriting letters to our friends and family, I think, really cannot be compared with typing.

'cannot compared'缺少被动语态助动词，正确表达是'cannot be compared'。

× Handwriting is really can deliver our emotions.

✓ Handwriting can really deliver our emotions.

'really can deliver'语序不正确，助动词can应紧跟主语，副词really放在can之后。