写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意动词形式和句子结构，避免重复和不完整的句子。可以尝试用更连贯的句子表达自己的兴趣和写作的目的。

示例: Yes, I write quite often because it is one of my hobbies. I want to become a writer in the future, so I usually spend my free time writing. It helps me relieve stress and also improves my Chinese skills.

建议: 回答内容不完整且表达混乱，建议明确说明喜欢写什么类型的内容，并用连贯的句子解释原因。注意句子完整性和逻辑性。

示例: I like to write about my daily experiences because it helps me relieve stress. When I read my old writings, I feel surprised and nostalgic, as they remind me of my childhood.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多且表达不清晰，建议用完整句子表达观点，明确说明写作内容是否会改变，并给出理由。

示例: I think it depends on the topic. If I write about daily events, those details might change over time. However, if I write about my future dreams, those might also change as I grow older and gain new experiences.

建议: 回答中存在语法和表达不完整的问题，建议用完整句子表达偏好，并说明原因。注意逻辑连贯和词汇准确。

示例: When I am at school, I prefer handwriting because we are not allowed to use phones or computers. However, at home, I like typing because it is faster and more convenient for me.

× Yes, I do. It is one of my hobby.

✓ Yes, I do. It is one of my hobbies.

hobby是可数名词，表示爱好，前面用one of my，后面应使用复数形式hobbies。

× It can prove my Chinese class grade.

✓ It can improve my Chinese class grade.

prove用法不当，应该用improve表示提高成绩。

× It is a good way to relieve us stress and it can record what happened in that is when I grew up, I saw the passage I write.

✓ It is a good way to relieve our stress and it can record what happened. When I grew up, I saw the passages I wrote.

us stress应为our stress，表示我们的压力；句子结构混乱，需拆分为两句；write应使用过去式wrote。

× I saw the passage I write.

✓ I saw the passages I wrote.

passage应使用复数形式passages，表示多篇文章；write应使用过去式wrote。

× It can be called my.

✓ It can be called mine.

句子不完整，缺少宾语，mine是所有格代词，表示“我的东西”，更合适。

× Well, I think it depend on what I write.

✓ Well, I think it depends on what I write.

主语是第三人称单数it，谓语动词depend应加-s，变为depends。

× If I write the things about what, what happened in.

✓ If I write about things that happened today,

句子结构混乱，缺少完整表达，需调整为完整的条件句。

× Today, it can change.

✓ Today, it can change.

此句无语法错误，保持原句。

× But if I see what will happen in the future, I think it will change.

✓ But if I see what will happen in the future, I think it will change.

此句无语法错误，保持原句。

× Because why become a? Older, I will think my dream.

✓ Because when I become older, I will think about my dream.

句子结构混乱，缺少连词when，且dream前应加介词about。

× When I in school, I depend on handwriting because in my school, we shouldn't take phone or computer in the school.

✓ When I am in school, I depend on handwriting because in my school, we shouldn't bring phones or computers.

缺少be动词am；take用法不当，应使用bring；phone和computer应使用复数形式。

× But if I stay at home, I prefer.

✓ But if I stay at home, I prefer typing.

句子不完整，缺少宾语typing。

× Typing is a good way to help me. Right, and it can pressure that.

✓ Typing is a good way to help me, and it can reduce pressure.

句子不通顺，right用法不当，应去掉；pressure用作动词不合适，应改为reduce pressure。