写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然的问题，例如“it is hard to write a whole passage”可以更简洁地表达，同时回答较长且有些重复。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，使表达更流畅自然。

示例: I don't write a lot because it takes a lot of time and effort. I usually write only when it's necessary, like for assignments or work.

建议: 回答中存在词汇错误（如“ride”应为“write”）和表达不清晰的问题，句子较长且缺少连贯的连接词。建议注意词汇准确性，使用连接词使句子更连贯，并简化表达。

示例: If I had the chance, I would write blogs about my daily life and thoughts because I enjoy interacting with readers and receiving feedback from friends and family.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整的问题，如“novels that shows the deeper”不明确。建议使用完整且准确的句子，具体说明变化的内容，并使用连接词增强逻辑性。

示例: Yes, definitely. As people grow older, their interests change. For example, when I was a child, I enjoyed writing about fiction novels, but now I prefer writing about more serious and deeper topics.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不连贯的问题，如“people are rely heavily”应为“people rely heavily”，句子较长且缺少连接词。建议注意语法准确性，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: I prefer typing because nowadays people rely heavily on computers and phones, and rarely use handwriting. Typing also helps me check grammar mistakes easily when writing essays.

× I don't like write a lot.

✓ I don't like writing a lot.

动词like后面应接动名词形式writing，而不是动词原形write。

× If I had the chance to ride, I would probably write down the blogs that shows my daily life and my thoughts because I really like the intense association with the viewers, with the Blogger and I really enjoyed the feedback from my friends and family.

✓ If I had the chance to write, I would probably write down the blogs that show my daily life and my thoughts because I really like the intense association with the viewers, with the blogger and I really enjoy the feedback from my friends and family.

动词ride应为write，符合上下文。blogs为复数，动词应为show而非shows。Blogger不应大写。时态保持一致，enjoyed改为现在时enjoy。

× But I when I grow older I would like some, you know, novels that shows the deeper.

✓ But when I grow older I would like some, you know, novels that show the deeper.

去掉多余的I。动词shows应为show，因novels为复数。

× I prefer typing nowadays people are rely heavily on computer and cell phones and seldom use the handwriting letters or the notes.

✓ I prefer typing nowadays people rely heavily on computers and cell phones and seldom use handwritten letters or notes.

动词rely不应加are。computer应为复数computers。handwriting letters应改为handwritten letters。the notes中the可去掉。

× Especially sometimes when you're writing an essay, you can post it to check the grammar mistakes.

✓ Especially sometimes when you're writing an essay, you can post it to have the grammar mistakes checked.

原句中post it to check语法不通，应改为post it to have the grammar mistakes checked，使用被动结构表达“让别人检查语法错误”。