写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "riding by hand" instead of "writing by hand." Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar. Also, avoid redundancy by making your points more concise.

示例: I don't write much these days because I mostly use a computer. When I was in school, we had to write everything by hand, but now typing is more convenient and faster.

建议: Your answer lacks coherence and has some awkward phrasing. Try to start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about what you write and why.

示例: I don't enjoy writing much, but I practice it to improve my handwriting. Usually, I write work-related things like plans and strategies to stay organized.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrases like "everything I will arrive." Try to express your ideas more naturally.

示例: In the future, I think most of what I write will be related to my work. I will write more plans and strategies to remember important details and stay focused. Writing on paper also helps me organize my thoughts better.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward expressions. Try to use more natural phrases and correct verb forms. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow with linking words.

示例: I definitely prefer typing because my work involves using computers. Nowadays, many people use technology for writing, so handwriting is becoming less common.

× we needed to write everything by our own hands

✓ we needed to write everything by our own hand

The phrase 'by our own hands' is incorrect because 'own' should be followed by a singular noun when referring to each person's individual hand. The correct phrase is 'by our own hand'. This is a common idiomatic expression meaning to do something personally.

× So riding by hand is something not as convenient as working on a computer.

✓ So writing by hand is something not as convenient as working on a computer.

The word 'riding' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'writing'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar error, but it affects sentence clarity. 'Writing by hand' is the correct phrase.

× I got used to work on the computer more.

✓ I got used to working on the computer more.

After the phrase 'got used to', the verb should be in the gerund form (-ing). Therefore, 'work' should be changed to 'working' to be grammatically correct.

× Most of the time I prefer writing something which is connected to my work, some plans, some strategies and that's all I do by my hand.

✓ Most of the time I prefer writing something which is connected to my work, some plans, some strategies and that's all I do by hand.

The phrase 'by my hand' is not idiomatic in English. The correct expression is 'by hand' without the possessive pronoun. This is a fixed phrase meaning 'manually'.

× Probably in the future, everything I will arrive will be connected to my work and I will write plans and strategies more and more to remember important details and stay more focused.

✓ Probably in the future, everything I will do will be connected to my work and I will write plans and strategies more and more to remember important details and stay more focused.

The verb 'arrive' is incorrectly used here; the intended meaning is likely 'do' or 'accomplish'. 'Arrive' does not fit the context of 'everything I will arrive'. This is a vocabulary misuse affecting the future tense sentence.

× I got used to type everything since my work is all related with computers and nowadays more and more people are getting used to work on technologies on devices and handwriting is not so popular.

✓ I got used to typing everything since my work is all related to computers and nowadays more and more people are getting used to working with technologies on devices and handwriting is not so popular.

Several preposition errors here: 'related with' should be 'related to'; after 'got used to' the verb should be in gerund form ('typing' not 'type'); 'getting used to work' should be 'getting used to working'; and 'work on technologies' is better as 'working with technologies'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness.