写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Try to be more direct and concise, avoiding filler words like 'uh'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and maintain coherence. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

示例: I don't write much at present because I mostly use technological devices for my work. However, when I was a child, I wrote a lot since my academic tasks required me to complete many notebooks and stories by hand.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and is incomplete at the end. Avoid repeating phrases like 'at that time' and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, complete your thoughts fully to make your answer effective. Try to provide specific reasons and examples to support your preference.

示例: Currently, I prefer using technological tools for assignments, but when I want to remember something for a long time, I write it down. This is because many scientists suggest that writing helps improve memory retention.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically using correct grammar. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect your points. Also, avoid vague phrases and be specific about how writing changes over time.

示例: Yes, I believe the things I write will change because the world is constantly evolving. New methods and preferences emerge regularly, so what I write now might differ from what I write in the future.

建议: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and some unclear phrases like 'brushing up my disk scale'. Try to use simple and clear language. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. Also, explain your reasons more specifically.

示例: Nowadays, I prefer typing because it is more convenient and saves time. When I use digital devices, I usually type my main notes since it helps me organize information efficiently.

× I read a lot because all my academic, uh, work, uh, I had done by writing, uh, I tried ample number of notebooks as well as stories and lessons.

✓ I read a lot because all my academic work was done by writing. I tried an ample number of notebooks as well as stories and lessons.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I had done' which is past perfect tense and unnecessary here; simple past 'was done' is appropriate. Also, 'ample number of notebooks' needs an article 'an' before 'ample' to be grammatically correct.

× But right now I use more technological gadgets as compared to handwritten.

✓ But right now I use technological gadgets more compared to handwriting.

The phrase 'as compared to handwritten' is incorrect because 'handwritten' is an adjective; the noun 'handwriting' should be used instead. Also, 'more technological gadgets' is better expressed as 'technological gadgets more' for clarity.

× if a person is write something.

✓ if a person writes something.

The phrase 'is write' is incorrect; the correct form is the simple present tense 'writes' for third person singular. 'Is' should not be used before the base verb here.

× Everything isn't changing this world.

✓ Everything is changing in this world.

The original sentence uses a negative form 'isn't changing' which contradicts the intended meaning. Also, the preposition 'in' is needed before 'this world' to indicate location.

× So when I was catered a lot of stuff at that time.

✓ So when I was taught a lot of stuff at that time.

The word 'catered' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'taught' to indicate learning or education in the past.

× because everyone have their own preference and own mind, so they usually change their mind.

✓ because everyone has their own preference and own mind, so they usually change their mind.

The subject 'everyone' is singular and requires the singular verb 'has' instead of 'have' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× I want to brushing up my disk scale and with the help of typing I think so it's more convenient for me and more time time saving for me.

✓ I want to brush up my keyboard skills and with the help of typing, I think it's more convenient for me and saves more time.

'Want to brushing' is incorrect; the base verb 'brush' should be used after 'want to'. 'Disk scale' is unclear and likely a mistake; 'keyboard skills' is more appropriate. Also, 'more time time saving' is redundant; 'saves more time' is correct.

× whenever I use my digital gadgets at that time, I usually type my main notes and whatever I want to try it.

✓ whenever I use my digital gadgets, I usually type my main notes and whatever I want to write.

The phrase 'whatever I want to try it' is incorrect; 'try' should be replaced with 'write' to match the context, and the pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect here.