写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时语言不够流畅，有重复词汇，且句子未完整表达意思。建议避免重复，保持句子完整且自然。

示例: Yes, I write a lot because I am a student. Most of my writing involves coursework, such as academic essays, reports, and presentation scripts.

建议: 回答中有重复词汇，句子结构稍显混乱。建议简化表达，避免重复，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

示例: Besides my academic assignments, I enjoy writing a diary because it is interesting and meaningful to record my daily life, so I can remember it later.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不完整且重复。建议注意时态和语法，避免重复，并完整表达观点。

示例: Definitely. The content of my writing changes as I grow older. For example, when I was a child, I used to add drawings to my diary, which was more childish, but now my writing is more mature.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用正确的语法，简洁表达观点，并使用连接词使句子流畅。

示例: I prefer typing on electronic devices, especially for long academic essays, because handwriting takes more time and is less efficient.

× I'm a student now, So what I write the most is actually my my coursework, such as some academic essay, some report or the scripts of doing present for the presentation.

✓ I'm a student now, so what I write the most is actually my coursework, such as some academic essays, some reports, or the scripts for presentations.

这里存在单复数错误。'essay'和'report'应使用复数形式，因为表示多篇文章和多份报告。'scripts of doing present for the presentation'表达不准确，改为'scripts for presentations'更符合习惯用法。

× the scripts of doing present for the presentation.

✓ the scripts for presentations.

介词使用错误，'scripts of doing present'不符合英语表达习惯，正确用法是'scripts for presentations'，表示为演讲准备的稿件。

× Besides of my academic assignment, I love writing diary because I think it's really interesting and meaningful to record my my daily life so that after after a period of time then I could I won't forget it.

✓ Besides my academic assignments, I love writing a diary because I think it's really interesting and meaningful to record my daily life so that after a period of time I won't forget it.

'Besides of'是错误搭配，正确用法是'Besides'后直接接名词。'academic assignment'应为复数形式'assignments'，因为通常有多项作业。'writing diary'应为'writing a diary'，加冠词。句中多余重复词汇也需删除。

× Besides of my academic assignment, I love writing diary because I think it's really interesting and meaningful to record my my daily life so that after after a period of time then I could I won't forget it.

✓ Besides my academic assignments, I love writing a diary because I think it's really interesting and meaningful to record my daily life so that after a period of time I won't forget it.

'assignment'应为复数形式'assigments'，因为通常有多项作业。

× Definitely because I think the content of my writing will affected by by my age, the change of my age, age stages.

✓ Definitely because I think the content of my writing will be affected by my age, the change of my age, age stages.

'will affected'缺少被动语态的助动词，正确形式是'will be affected'。

× For example, when I was a kid and I write my diary and I would add some drawing is more is more child childish, but nowadays.

✓ For example, when I was a kid, I wrote my diary and I would add some drawings which were more childish, but nowadays...

时态错误，描述过去的动作应使用过去时'wrote'。'drawing'应为复数'drawings'。'is more is more child childish'表达重复且错误，改为'which were more childish'。

× I prefer typing on my electronic devices in particular to riding some long academic essays because there are so many words.

✓ I prefer typing on my electronic devices, in particular when writing some long academic essays because there are so many words.

'to riding'用词错误，应为'when writing'或'some long academic essays'前加介词短语。

× If I handwrite, then I have to spend a lot of time to do it is the efficiency are quite low.

✓ If I handwrite, then I have to spend a lot of time doing it because the efficiency is quite low.

'to do it is the efficiency are quite low'结构混乱，应改为'doing it because the efficiency is quite low'，动名词形式和主谓一致需注意。

× If I handwrite, then I have to spend a lot of time to do it is the efficiency are quite low.

✓ If I handwrite, then I have to spend a lot of time doing it because the efficiency is quite low.

主谓不一致，'efficiency'为单数，谓语动词应为'is'而非'are'。