写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: คุณควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้องและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น ใช้ 'remembering' แทน 'remember' และ 'like to write' แทน 'like write' รวมถึงลดการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อนและเพิ่มความชัดเจนในประโยค

示例: Yes, I really enjoy writing because it helps me remember things clearly. Nowadays, I prefer writing on my mobile phone since it's very convenient.

建议: ควรเพิ่มรายละเอียดและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อทำให้คำตอบสมบูรณ์และลื่นไหลมากขึ้น เช่น อธิบายว่าการเขียนอารมณ์ช่วยให้เข้าใจตัวเองดีขึ้นอย่างไร

示例: I like writing about my emotions every day because it helps me understand myself better. Moreover, it allows me to reflect on my feelings and improve my mood.

建议: ควรปรับปรุงความชัดเจนและโครงสร้างประโยคให้สมบูรณ์ รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิดอย่างมีเหตุผล

示例: I don't think what I write will change because once I write something, it has already happened. However, my feelings about those events might change over time.

建议: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และการใช้คำให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'I have' แทน 'I'm have' และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้ประโยคลื่นไหลและชัดเจน

示例: It depends on the situation. If I have a computer, I prefer typing, but if I don't, for example when writing my diary, I prefer handwriting.

× it's very good for remember something clearly

✓ it's very good for remembering something clearly

After the preposition 'for', the verb should be in the '-ing' form, so 'remember' should be 'remembering'. This is a common structure in English where 'for' is followed by a gerund to indicate purpose.

× I like write on the mobile phone

✓ I like writing on the mobile phone

'Like' is followed by a verb in the '-ing' form when expressing enjoyment of an activity, so 'write' should be 'writing'.

× that's very convenient to write to remember

✓ that's very convenient for writing to remember

'Convenient' is usually followed by 'for' plus a gerund to indicate the activity that is convenient, so 'to write' should be 'for writing'.

× I like writing my emotions every day

✓ I like writing about my emotions every day

'Writing emotions' is unnatural; the correct phrase is 'writing about my emotions' to indicate the topic of writing.

× I think I am a good friend for myself

✓ I think I am a good friend to myself

'Friend to someone' is the correct collocation, not 'friend for someone'.

× if I will write down something it's already have done

✓ if I write down something, it's already done

In conditional sentences of the first type, 'if' clause uses present simple, not 'will'. Also, 'have done' is incorrect here; 'done' is sufficient.

× it's already have done

✓ it's already done

'It' is singular, so 'have' is incorrect; 'done' is the past participle used with 'is' here.

× So I think can't change anything

✓ So I think it can't change anything

The sentence lacks a subject before 'can't'; adding 'it' clarifies the subject.

× maybe I have a few feelings about that

✓ maybe I have a few feelings about that

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× So if something change, I think that

✓ So if something changes, I think that

The verb 'change' should be in third person singular present tense 'changes' to agree with the singular subject 'something'.

× If I'm have a computer now

✓ If I have a computer now

'I'm have' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I have' for present simple tense.

× maybe I prefer to handwriting

✓ maybe I prefer handwriting

'Prefer' is followed directly by the noun or gerund without 'to' in this context; 'handwriting' is a noun here.