写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和重复表达，且使用了过多的填充词“uh”，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并减少口头语，使表达更自然流畅。

示例: Yes, I wrote many dissertation essays and research reports during college. Although the tasks were sometimes difficult, I found the process interesting because it helped me refine my ideas.

建议: 回答中有较多的口头语和不连贯的表达，建议使用更清晰的句子结构，减少重复，并具体说明喜欢写作的原因，使内容更丰富。

示例: During college, we had the freedom to choose our essay topics. I enjoyed writing about advertisements and gender relationships because these subjects allowed me to explore social issues in depth.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，建议注意时态和单复数形式，使用连贯的句子，并具体说明写作内容的变化。

示例: Yes, my writing has changed over time, not only in essay structure but also in the topics I explore. For example, I have consistently focused on discourse analysis, especially analyzing advertisements.

建议: 回答中表达不够清晰，存在重复和语法错误，建议简化句子，避免重复，并具体说明喜欢打字的原因。

示例: I prefer typing because I am used to a paperless study style. Typing is convenient since I can easily copy and paste keywords when writing long texts.

× Yes, I wrote a lot of dissertation essays and research reports during my college.

✓ Yes, I wrote a lot of dissertation essays and research reports during my college years.

“during my college”表达不完整，应该用“during my college years”表示“在我大学期间”。

× Uh, to be honest, even though the task itself sometimes could be very difficult, but I found that it is interesting, uh, mainly for the process that you're trying to modify your own ideas.

✓ Uh, to be honest, even though the task itself sometimes could be very difficult, I found that it is interesting, mainly because of the process of trying to modify your own ideas.

“even though... but...”结构重复，应该去掉“but”。此外，“mainly for the process that you're trying to modify your own ideas”表达不通顺，改为“mainly because of the process of trying to modify your own ideas”更自然。

× Well, during my college, uh, based on a set, uh, general task, we have the freedom to discuss what the specific topic we're going to write.

✓ Well, during my college years, based on a set of general tasks, we had the freedom to discuss which specific topic we were going to write about.

“during my college”应为“during my college years”；“based on a set, uh, general task”应为“based on a set of general tasks”；“what the specific topic we're going to write”应改为“which specific topic we were going to write about”，更符合英语表达习惯。

× So I'm really interested in, uh, writing some tasks related to advertisement and, uh, uh, gender relationship, female images kind of things.

✓ So I'm really interested in writing some tasks related to advertisements and gender relationships, female images, and similar topics.

“related to advertisement”应为复数“advertisements”；“gender relationship”应为复数“gender relationships”；“female images kind of things”表达不准确，改为“female images, and similar topics”更清晰。

× Yes, not only from the structure of the essay itself, but also the things I'm trying to describe and find out the outcomes.

✓ Yes, not only in the structure of the essay itself, but also in the things I'm trying to describe and the outcomes I find.

“from the structure”应改为“in the structure”；“find out the outcomes”表达不自然，改为“the outcomes I find”更合适。

× But the one thing I have continued to write throughout the four years is discourse analysis.

✓ But the one thing I have continued to write about throughout the four years is discourse analysis.

“write”后面需要介词“about”来引出写作的主题。

× I'm pretty interested in analyse advertisement.

✓ I'm pretty interested in analysing advertisements.

“interested in”后面应接动名词形式“analysing”；“advertisement”应为复数“advertisements”。

× Well, I prefer typing because I've been used to the study style of no paper, no paper noting, and it is convenient because you can copy and paste some keywords for long words writing.

✓ Well, I prefer typing because I've gotten used to the study style of no paper, no paper noting, and it is convenient because you can copy and paste some keywords when writing long texts.

“I've been used to”应改为“I've gotten used to”表示习惯；“for long words writing”表达不正确，改为“when writing long texts”更自然。