写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中有语法错误和用词不当，如“fried into a lot”应为“write a lot”。建议注意动词的正确使用，并简洁表达你的观点。

示例: Yes, I write a lot because I love literature. After finishing a book, I usually write down my feelings in my notebook to remember the emotions I experienced.

建议: 回答中表达不够自然，且句子结构有些混乱。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意句子连贯性。

示例: I like to write about my personal emotions because it's hard for me to share them with others. Writing helps me process and understand my feelings better.

建议: 回答较为清晰，但表达可以更简洁自然。建议减少重复，使用更地道的表达。

示例: Yes, I believe the things I write will change over time because my preferences and feelings evolve as I grow older.

建议: 回答表达了个人喜好，但用词稍显口语化。建议使用更正式和准确的词汇，增强表达效果。

示例: I prefer handwriting because typing feels impersonal to me, and I dislike the clicking sounds from the keyboard and mouse.

× Yes, I always fried into a lot because I love literature and when I finish reading a book I always write my feelings on my notebook so that I will remember that kind of emotion.

✓ Yes, I always write a lot because I love literature and when I finish reading a book I always write my feelings in my notebook so that I will remember that kind of emotion.

这里的“fried”是过去式，但句子描述的是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时“write”。另外，“write on my notebook”应改为“write in my notebook”，因为写在笔记本里用介词“in”。

× Yes, I always fried into a lot because I love literature and when I finish reading a book I always write my feelings on my notebook so that I will remember that kind of emotion.

✓ Yes, I always write a lot because I love literature and when I finish reading a book I always write my feelings in my notebook so that I will remember that kind of emotion.

“write on my notebook”中的介词“on”用法不当，正确表达是“write in my notebook”，表示写在笔记本里面。

× I like to write some personal emotions because it's tough for me to tell other people, so I will write them down and just watch it myself so that I can digest.

✓ I like to write some personal emotions because it's tough for me to tell other people, so I will write them down and just watch them myself so that I can digest.

“write them down”指代“some personal emotions”，是复数，后面“just watch it myself”中的“it”应改为复数“them”，保持代词一致。

× Yes, I think so because my personal preference and my feelings will change with the day and with my aging, so I think I will change the things I write.

✓ Yes, I think so because my personal preferences and my feelings change with the day and with my aging, so I think I will change the things I write.

“my personal preference”应为复数“preferences”，且“will change”描述的是习惯性或普遍事实，改为一般现在时“change”更合适。

× Yes, I think so because my personal preference and my feelings will change with the day and with my aging, so I think I will change the things I write.

✓ Yes, I think so because my personal preferences and my feelings change with the day and with my age, so I think I will change the things I write.

“with my aging”表达不自然，通常用“with my age”表示随着年龄的增长。

× I prefer handwriting when I am writing because I find typing is such a cold thing and I don't like the sound of clicking my mouse and my computer.

✓ I prefer handwriting when I am writing because I find typing is such a cold thing and I don't like the sound of clicking my mouse and keyboard.

“clicking my mouse and my computer”中“computer”不合适，应该是“keyboard”，因为打字时鼠标和键盘发出声音。