写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中表达了不喜欢写作的观点，但语言表达不够自然，且有语法错误，如"writing is very tired"应为"writing is very tiring"。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意语法准确性。

示例: I don't write very often because I find it quite tiring, both physically and mentally.

建议: 回答内容较丰富，但句子结构稍显重复，且部分表达不够地道，如"some Diaries"应为"diaries"，建议使用连词使句子更流畅。

示例: I like writing diaries to record interesting events and my feelings from the day, because looking back at them always makes me happy.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，如"wouldn't be change"应为"wouldn't change"，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和语法的正确使用。

示例: I don't think what I write will change because it's important for me to record positive memories, especially since I have experienced depression.

建议: 回答表达了偏好，但句子结构简单，且"type it in a very slow speed"表达不自然。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并丰富细节。

示例: I prefer handwriting because I'm not very fast at typing on a computer, and I think my handwriting looks nice.

× I think writing is very tired, not only for physical feelings but also for my brain.

✓ I think writing is very tiring, not only for physical feelings but also for my brain.

这里“tired”是形容词，表示“感到疲倦”，而句中需要表达“令人感到疲惫的”，应使用现在分词“tiring”作形容词，表示“令人疲惫的”。

× I like to write some Diaries to record some interesting things that happened on that day.

✓ I like to write some diaries to record some interesting things that happened on that day.

“Diaries”是复数形式，前面不需要大写，且“some diaries”表示一些日记，符合复数形式。

× It's not just to record some stories, but also record happiness, feelings.

✓ It's not just to record some stories, but also to record happiness and feelings.

并列结构中，两个动词短语应保持一致，缺少第二个“to”导致结构不完整，应补充“to record”。

× It wouldn't be change because I know it is the most important thing for me to record the interesting things.

✓ It wouldn't change because I know it is the most important thing for me to record the interesting things.

“wouldn't be change”中“be”多余，正确用法是“wouldn't change”，表示“不会改变”。

× I have depression before, so it is very necessary for me to keep positive when I look back all the things I write.

✓ I had depression before, so it is very necessary for me to keep positive when I look back at all the things I wrote.

“have depression before”应使用过去时“had”，表示过去的状态；“look back all the things I write”中“look back”后应加介词“at”，且“write”应改为过去时“wrote”，因为回顾的是过去写的内容。

× I look back all the things I write.

✓ I look back at all the things I write.

“look back”后面需要加介词“at”，表示“回顾”。

× I prefer handwriting when I am writing because I am not good at typing on a computer.

✓ I prefer handwriting when I write because I am not good at typing on a computer.

“when I am writing”可以简化为“一般现在时”表达习惯，即“when I write”，更符合习惯用法。

× I always type it in a very slow speed and my handwriting is very beautiful.

✓ I always type at a very slow speed and my handwriting is very beautiful.

“type in a very slow speed”中应使用介词“at”表示速度，正确表达为“type at a very slow speed”。