写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh những câu không hoàn chỉnh và sử dụng từ ngữ chính xác hơn. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, giới hạn trong 3-4 câu, và tránh lặp lại hoặc dùng từ không phù hợp như "I think it's here. Big number."

示例: Yes, I write quite a lot, especially when preparing for literature exams. Usually, I write essays that are about two or three pages long. Writing helps me organize my thoughts clearly.

建议: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "diary modes" hay "share off my things". Hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và liên kết ý bằng các từ nối để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I like to write diary entries because they allow me to share my daily experiences and stories. Moreover, writing helps me express my feelings, which makes me feel more relaxed and comfortable.

建议: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp và bổ sung lý do cụ thể, dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: No, I don't think the things I write will change because I have kept the habit of writing a diary since I was young. I believe I will continue this habit in the future as well.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "right here writing" hay "more is it the way". Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi để câu trả lời tự nhiên và dễ hiểu hơn.

示例: I prefer handwriting to typing because writing by hand feels more comfortable and convenient. It also helps me express my feelings more easily.

× I can use all of my pen to do a essay.

✓ I can use all of my pens to do an essay.

The noun 'pen' should be plural 'pens' because 'all of my' refers to multiple items. Also, 'a essay' is incorrect; it should be 'an essay' because 'essay' starts with a vowel sound.

× It's about two or three page.

✓ It's about two or three pages.

The noun 'page' should be plural 'pages' when preceded by a number greater than one.

× I think it's here. Big number.

✓ I think it's here. A big number.

The article 'a' is missing before 'big number' to correctly modify the noun phrase.

× I think I'd like to write diary modes because it is a way for me to share off my things about a day and all of the story in the day.

✓ I think I'd like to write diary entries because it is a way for me to share my experiences about the day and all the stories of the day.

The phrase 'diary modes' is incorrect; 'diary entries' is appropriate. 'Share off my things' is incorrect; it should be 'share my experiences'. Also, 'a day' should be 'the day' to refer to a specific day.

× And is he also a way for me to express all of my feelings which had me more relaxed and comfortable?

✓ And it is also a way for me to express all of my feelings which make me more relaxed and comfortable.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect here; it should be 'it' referring to the diary. Also, 'had me' is incorrect; 'make me' is the correct present tense verb to express ongoing effect.

× I always have a habit of writing diary, seeing I was young.

✓ I have always had a habit of writing a diary since I was young.

The phrase 'seeing I was young' is incorrect; 'since I was young' is the correct expression. Also, 'have a habit' should be in present perfect 'have always had' to indicate a continuous habit from past to present.

× I always have a habit of writing diary

✓ I always have a habit of writing a diary

The noun 'diary' should be preceded by the article 'a' to indicate a singular countable noun.

× So I think that this is the habit that I cannot give up up to now and in the future too.

✓ So I think that this is the habit that I cannot give up until now and in the future too.

The phrase 'give up up to now' is incorrect; 'give up until now' is the correct prepositional phrase to indicate time.

× So I think in the future I would do the same thing like like now.

✓ So I think in the future I would do the same thing as I do now.

The phrase 'like like now' is incorrect; 'the same thing as I do now' is the correct comparative structure.

× Well, I prefer right here writing to typing because I think when I'm right by hand on the paper, it's a more comfortable and convenient for me more is it the way for me to express all of my feelings and I can easily put.

✓ Well, I prefer handwriting to typing because I think when I write by hand on paper, it's more comfortable and convenient for me. It is also a way for me to express all of my feelings and I can easily put them down.

The phrase 'right here writing' is incorrect; 'handwriting' is the correct noun. 'Right by hand' should be 'write by hand'. 'It's a more comfortable' should be 'it's more comfortable'. The sentence was fragmented and needed to be split for clarity. 'Put' should be followed by an object, so 'put them down' is appropriate.