写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'sometime' nên là 'sometimes', và câu cần được chia nhỏ để rõ ràng hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ phù hợp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

示例: Yes, I write a lot because my main subject is literature, which requires frequent writing assignments. Besides schoolwork, I sometimes write letters or emails to my cousins studying abroad. I also enjoy writing birthday cards for my relatives and friends.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, ví dụ 'after I'm reading' nên là 'after I read', 'sometime' nên là 'sometimes', và câu cuối chưa hoàn chỉnh. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

示例: I enjoy writing essays because literature is my main subject. After reading a book or watching a movie, I write down my thoughts and emotions in my notebook. Sometimes, I also post these reflections on social media, where many people appreciate my posts.

建议: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc, ví dụ 'I'm not have a like certain hobbies' không đúng, nên sửa thành 'I don't have certain hobbies'. Bạn nên dùng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời logic hơn.

示例: Yes, I think the things I write will change because my hobbies change over time. Currently, I enjoy writing about books and movies I have experienced. However, in the future, I might prefer writing about flowers or beautiful scenery I have seen.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp như 'It's depends' nên là 'It depends', 'prefer to handwriting' nên là 'prefer handwriting', và 'prefer tapping' nên là 'prefer typing'. Ngoài ra, tránh dùng từ thừa như 'uh' và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: It depends on what I need to write. For example, if I write birthday cards or letters to friends and cousins, I prefer handwriting because it feels more romantic. However, for emails or chatting with friends, I prefer typing since it is more convenient.

× I need to write a lot in my school time and also sometime I write letters or emails from my cousins who are studying abroad right now

✓ I need to write a lot in my school time and also sometimes I write letters or emails to my cousins who are studying abroad right now

The word 'sometime' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'write letters or emails from my cousins' is incorrect because you write letters or emails to someone, not from them.

× and also I write a birthday card to my relatives and my friends too.

✓ and also I write birthday cards to my relatives and my friends too.

When referring to multiple recipients, 'birthday card' should be pluralized to 'birthday cards' to match the plural 'relatives and friends'.

× I really enjoy writing essays because my main subject is literature, so after I'm reading a book or watching a movie I will write my thought and my emotions of this into my notebook

✓ I really enjoy writing essays because my main subject is literature, so after I read a book or watch a movie I write my thoughts and my emotions about it into my notebook

The phrase 'after I'm reading' is incorrect; it should be simple present 'after I read' to indicate a habitual action. 'My thought' should be plural 'my thoughts' because multiple thoughts are implied. 'My emotions of this' is awkward; 'my emotions about it' is more natural.

× and also sometime when I post it's in the social medias.

✓ and also sometimes when I post it on social media.

Again, 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Post it's' is incorrect; it should be 'post it'. 'Social medias' is incorrect; 'social media' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized.

× A lot of people keen on my posts and I.

✓ A lot of people are keen on my posts and me.

The sentence lacks the verb 'are' to be complete. Also, 'keen on my posts and I' is incorrect; the pronoun should be 'me' as the object of the preposition 'on'.

× Maybe yes because I'm not have a like certain hobbies like my hobby is change over the time.

✓ Maybe yes because I don't have certain hobbies; my hobbies change over time.

'I'm not have' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I don't have'. 'Like my hobby is change over the time' is awkward; it should be 'my hobbies change over time'.

× So right now I can enjoy writing about the books or the movies that I have watched, but maybe in the future I will enjoy to write about the flowers or the scenery that I have seen in my life.

✓ So right now I enjoy writing about the books or movies that I have watched, but maybe in the future I will enjoy writing about the flowers or scenery that I have seen in my life.

'I can enjoy' is better as 'I enjoy' to express current preference. 'I will enjoy to write' is incorrect; after 'enjoy' the verb should be in -ing form: 'enjoy writing'.

× It's depends on what I need to write.

✓ It depends on what I need to write.

'It's depends' is incorrect; 'depends' is a verb and does not need 'it is' contracted. The correct form is 'It depends'.

× I will prefer to handwriting because I think it's more romantic.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I think it's more romantic.

'Prefer to handwriting' is incorrect; 'prefer' is followed directly by a noun or gerund without 'to'. Also, 'will prefer' is unnecessary here; simple present 'prefer' is better for habitual actions.

× But if I need to write an emails or chatting with my friends, I will prefer tapping because it's more convenient.

✓ But if I need to write emails or chat with my friends, I prefer typing because it's more convenient.

'An emails' is incorrect; 'emails' is plural and does not need 'an'. 'Chatting' should be 'chat' to parallel 'write emails'. 'Will prefer tapping' is incorrect; 'prefer typing' is correct. 'Tapping' is incorrect; the correct word is 'typing'.