写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat clear but has issues with sentence structure and fluency. Try to avoid sentence fragments and pauses, and connect your ideas smoothly using linking words. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

示例: I used to write a lot, but with advances in technology, my writing has decreased. Now, I mostly make notes on my phone, but I still prefer writing by hand. Additionally, I enjoy sending handwritten letters to my close friends.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and check for correct verb forms. Also, try to be more specific about your experiences.

示例: I like to write my To-Do List because crossing off completed tasks gives me great satisfaction. Additionally, I sometimes write down my personal experiences to reflect on them later, especially when I feel down.

建议: Your answer has some unclear parts and grammatical mistakes. Avoid unclear words like 'Lao' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to show the progression of your writing topics over time.

示例: Yes, definitely. Over the years, the things I write have changed. As a child, I wrote about my friends. Later, when I was in a relationship, I wrote about my husband. Now, I write stories for my son, inspired by good models.

建议: Your answer is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'I'ma pull kind of person'. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to contrast your preferences clearly. Also, avoid redundancy and clarify your points.

示例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me freely express my ideas. However, typing is necessary nowadays since most things are done digitally. Still, I am the type of person who enjoys writing personalized letters by hand.

× but due to the advancement in the technology, my writing. Has got decreased.

✓ but due to the advancement in technology, my writing has decreased.

The phrase 'advancement in the technology' is incorrect because 'technology' is an uncountable noun and does not require the definite article 'the'. Also, 'Has got decreased' is awkward; 'has decreased' is more natural in English (Canada). The period after 'writing' is misplaced and should be removed to maintain sentence flow.

× Now I'm making notes in my phone, but still I prefer writing and.

✓ Now I'm making notes on my phone, but I still prefer writing.

The conjunction 'and' at the end is incomplete and unnecessary. Also, the correct preposition is 'on my phone' rather than 'in my phone'. The sentence is corrected to remove the dangling 'and' and fix the preposition.

× I also sometimes right down my experiences to store them and. Read them when I feel low.

✓ I also sometimes write down my experiences to store them and read them when I feel low.

The verb 'write' was misspelled as 'right'. The period after 'and' is incorrect and breaks the sentence. The sentence should be continuous with 'and read them' to maintain proper sentence structure.

× The things that I write are changing over years.

✓ The things that I write have been changing over the years.

The phrase 'are changing over years' is awkward. Using the present perfect continuous tense 'have been changing' better expresses an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Also, 'over the years' requires the definite article 'the'.

× Later, after being in a relationship, I used to Lao and write about my husband.

✓ Later, after being in a relationship, I used to laugh and write about my husband.

The word 'Lao' appears to be a typo or incorrect word. It is corrected to 'laugh' to make sense in context. Also, 'used to' is correctly used here to describe past habitual actions.

× Now I have a son and I'm writing stories for him. With a good model.

✓ Now I have a son and I'm writing stories for him with a good model.

The sentence fragment 'With a good model.' should be connected to the previous sentence to form a complete sentence. This correction improves sentence structure and clarity.

× Because it allows me to free flow the ideas that are there in my head.

✓ Because it allows me to freely flow the ideas that are in my head.

The phrase 'free flow' is incorrect here. The adverb 'freely' should be used to modify the verb 'flow'. Also, 'that are there in my head' is wordy; 'that are in my head' is sufficient.

× However, typing is also necessary these days because everything can be written in hand.

✓ However, typing is also necessary these days because everything cannot be written by hand.

The phrase 'written in hand' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'written by hand'. Also, the meaning suggests that not everything can be handwritten, so 'cannot' is added for clarity.

× But. I'ma pull kind of person who write personalized letters with my hand.

✓ But I'm the kind of person who writes personalized letters by hand.

'I'ma pull' is a typo and corrected to 'I'm the'. The verb 'write' should be 'writes' to agree with the singular subject 'person' (subject-verb agreement). Also, 'with my hand' is better expressed as 'by hand' in English.