写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用更自然的句子结构，避免冗长和重复。可以直接回答问题，然后简要说明原因。

示例: I haven't written much in the past two years because I was busy with my job. But now that I have more free time, I want to practice writing to express my thoughts and feelings.

建议: 回答中表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议用简单明了的句子描述你喜欢写的内容，并说明原因。

示例: I like to write about funny or unusual things that happened in my daily life or at work because I think people will find them interesting.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，建议用更准确的词汇和句子表达未来写作计划。

示例: Yes, right now I like to write about unusual events that happen around me, but in the future, I hope to write novels or fictional stories based on my imagination.

建议: 回答中有语法和表达不清的问题，建议用连贯的句子清楚表达你喜欢打字的原因。

示例: I prefer typing because it is faster and allows me to write more in a short time. Also, I can easily save and find my work on the Internet.

× In the past two years I seldom write things, but I just acquitted my job so I have many spare time to practice writing and I want to write something and opposed to them on the right note to express my ideals and feelings.

✓ In the past two years I seldom wrote things, but I just quit my job so I have much spare time to practice writing and I want to write something and respond to them on the right note to express my ideals and feelings.

The verb 'write' should be in past tense 'wrote' to match the time frame 'in the past two years'. 'Acquitted' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'quit' meaning to leave a job. 'Many spare time' is incorrect; 'spare time' is uncountable, so 'much spare time' is correct. 'Opposed to them' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'respond to them'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× I want to write something and opposed to them on the right note to express my ideals and feelings.

✓ I want to write something and respond to them on the right note to express my ideals and feelings.

The phrase 'opposed to them' is incorrect in this context. The correct phrase is 'respond to them' to indicate replying or reacting appropriately. Using the correct preposition 'to' with 'respond' is necessary for proper meaning.

× I want to write something of which happened in my daily life or offices in the past two years since sizing something or really ridiculous and people will interested in them because it's very weird.

✓ I want to write about things that happened in my daily life or office in the past two years since some were really ridiculous and people will be interested in them because they're very weird.

The phrase 'of which happened' is incorrect; 'about things that happened' is correct. 'Offices' should be singular 'office' to match context. 'Since sizing something' is unclear and likely incorrect; replaced with 'since some were'. 'People will interested' lacks auxiliary verb 'be'; correct form is 'people will be interested'. These corrections fix tense, preposition, and subject-verb agreement errors.

× I want to write something of which happened in my daily life or offices in the past two years since sizing something or really ridiculous and people will interested in them because it's very weird.

✓ I want to write about things that happened in my daily life or office in the past two years since some were really ridiculous and people will be interested in them because they're very weird.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used with 'which happened'; the correct preposition is 'about' to indicate the topic of writing. Correct preposition use is essential for clarity.

× people will interested in them because it's very weird.

✓ people will be interested in them because they're very weird.

The modal verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb plus 'be' for the passive voice. 'Will interested' is incorrect; it should be 'will be interested'. This correction ensures proper modal verb construction.

× Yes, at this moment I want to rent something unusual happened around me, but maybe in the future I will write some novels, some fiction stories, which is totally I imagined about.

✓ Yes, at this moment I want to write about something unusual that happened around me, but maybe in the future I will write some novels, some fiction stories, which I have totally imagined.

'Rent' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'write about'. 'Something unusual happened' needs a relative pronoun 'that' to connect the clause. 'Which is totally I imagined about' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'which I have totally imagined'. These corrections fix verb choice, sentence structure, and tense.

× Yes, at this moment I want to rent something unusual happened around me, but maybe in the future I will write some novels, some fiction stories, which is totally I imagined about.

✓ Yes, at this moment I want to write about something unusual that happened around me, but maybe in the future I will write some novels, some fiction stories, which I have totally imagined.

The preposition 'about' is necessary after 'write' to indicate the topic. Also, 'imagined about' is incorrect; 'imagined' does not require 'about'. Proper preposition use improves sentence clarity.

× which is totally I imagined about.

✓ which I have totally imagined.

The relative pronoun 'which' should be followed by the subject 'I' and the verb 'have imagined' in present perfect tense. The phrase 'imagined about' is incorrect; 'imagine' does not take 'about' in this context.

× I prefer typing because typing is faster and I can write down more things in a limited period of time, and typing can memorize things in the on the Internet and it's easy to record. And the return.

✓ I prefer typing because typing is faster and I can write down more things in a limited period of time, and typing can help me remember things on the Internet and it's easy to record. And the return.

'Typing can memorize things in the on the Internet' is incorrect; machines do not memorize, and the phrase 'in the on the Internet' is redundant and incorrect. Corrected to 'typing can help me remember things on the Internet'. This fixes pronoun and preposition misuse.