写作— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Do you write a lot?
考生
These days I prefer using iPad an all other electronic devices more than writing on a paper, so I don't really have any opportunities to use pencils an no down on the paper.
考官
What do you like to write? Why?
考生
I only write when I'm practicing IELTS writing an other school works that I have because. I'm not an art person, so I don't really Draw Something on paper so. Yeah, I only write Akademik stuff.
考官
Do you think the things you write would change?
考生
Yes, I think in the future when I go to the university I might write more Akademik stuff than this date then right now. So yeah, my writings will be more complex and. More detailed I guess.
考官
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
考生
I would definitely prefer typing on computers because it's more time efficient and more convenient since when you write on the paper you have you need to bring erasers to erase something that you did wrong. But on the other hand for typing you can easily delete what you've just right so.
评估
总分
Part 1
Do you write a lot?
分数: 65.0建议: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้องและชัดเจนมากขึ้น เช่น ใช้คำว่า 'write on paper' แทน 'no down on the paper' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น 'an all other' ควรเป็น 'and other'
示例: These days, I prefer using my iPad and other electronic devices rather than writing on paper, so I don't often have opportunities to use pencils or write by hand.
What do you like to write? Why?
分数: 60.0建议: ควรปรับปรุงการเชื่อมประโยคให้ลื่นไหลและใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'academic' แทน 'Akademik' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำที่ไม่จำเป็น เช่น 'so' ซ้ำๆ
示例: I usually write only when practicing IELTS writing or doing other school assignments because I'm not interested in drawing. Therefore, I mainly write academic content.
Do you think the things you write would change?
分数: 70.0建议: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำเชื่อม เช่น ใช้ 'than now' แทน 'than this date then right now' และเชื่อมประโยคให้สมบูรณ์
示例: Yes, I think in the future, when I go to university, I will write more academic materials than I do now. So, my writing will become more complex and detailed.
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
分数: 75.0建议: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำเชื่อม เช่น 'more time-efficient' และ 'more convenient' รวมถึงการใช้คำที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'what you've just written' แทน 'what you've just right'
示例: I definitely prefer typing on computers because it is more time-efficient and convenient. When writing on paper, you need to bring erasers to correct mistakes, but with typing, you can easily delete what you've just written.
语法
× These days I prefer using iPad an all other electronic devices more than writing on a paper, so I don't really have any opportunities to use pencils an no down on the paper.
✓ These days I prefer using iPad and all other electronic devices more than writing on paper, so I don't really have any opportunities to use pencils and write down on the paper.
The preposition 'on a paper' is incorrect; 'on paper' is the correct phrase. Also, 'an' should be 'and' to connect items. 'No down' is incorrect; it should be 'write down'. Suggestions: Use 'on paper' without an article, use 'and' to connect items, and use the correct verb phrase 'write down'.
× I only write when I'm practicing IELTS writing an other school works that I have because.
✓ I only write when I'm practicing IELTS writing and other school work that I have.
The preposition 'an' is incorrect; it should be 'and' to connect items. Also, 'school works' should be 'school work' as 'work' is uncountable. Suggestions: Use 'and' to connect items and use 'work' as uncountable noun.
× I'm not an art person, so I don't really Draw Something on paper so.
✓ I'm not an art person, so I don't really draw something on paper.
Capitalization error: 'Draw' should be lowercase 'draw'. Also, 'Something' should be lowercase 'something'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'so' which is unnecessary. Suggestions: Use correct capitalization and remove unnecessary conjunction at the end.
× Yes, I think in the future when I go to the university I might write more Akademik stuff than this date then right now.
✓ Yes, I think in the future when I go to university I might write more academic stuff than at this date than right now.
The article 'the' before 'university' is unnecessary when speaking generally. 'Akademik' is misspelled; correct spelling is 'academic'. The phrase 'than this date then right now' is awkward; 'than at this date than right now' is better but still awkward; better to say 'than I do now'. Suggestions: Remove unnecessary articles, correct spelling, and improve comparison phrase.
× I would definitely prefer typing on computers because it's more time efficient and more convenient since when you write on the paper you have you need to bring erasers to erase something that you did wrong.
✓ I would definitely prefer typing on computers because it's more time efficient and more convenient since when you write on paper you need to bring erasers to erase something that you did wrong.
The phrase 'on the paper' should be 'on paper' without the article. Also, 'you have you need' is redundant; 'you need' is sufficient. Suggestions: Use 'on paper' and remove redundant words.
× But on the other hand for typing you can easily delete what you've just right so.
✓ But on the other hand, for typing you can easily delete what you've just written.
The verb 'right' is incorrect; it should be the past participle 'written'. Also, a comma after 'on the other hand' improves sentence clarity. Suggestions: Use correct past participle form and add comma for clarity.
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