写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并且注意时态和单词拼写。可以先直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体说明写作的内容和原因。

示例: Yes, I write a lot every day. I like to record my daily experiences and thoughts because it helps me remember important moments and express my feelings.

建议: 回答中语法和表达不准确，建议先明确回答喜欢写什么，再说明原因。使用连词使句子更连贯，避免词汇错误。

示例: I like to write about my moods and emotions because it helps me understand myself better. I also enjoy using beautiful words to express how I feel.

建议: 回答不够清晰，语法错误较多。建议直接回答问题，并用简单句说明原因，避免复杂句式。

示例: No, I don't think what I write will change because I write about my feelings at that moment. Writing helps me express myself honestly.

建议: 回答中有很多语法和词汇错误，建议先明确表达喜欢手写的原因，使用连词使句子更流畅。

示例: I prefer handwriting because I enjoy writing in notebooks or journals. It feels more personal and I can look back at my writings easily.

× Yes, I do write a lot I mom.

✓ Yes, I do write a lot, Mom.

这里的'mom'应为称呼，首字母应大写，并且前面需要逗号隔开，表示对母亲的称呼。

× I like to read and how to ride.

✓ I like to read and write.

原句中'how to ride'不符合语境，应该是表达喜欢阅读和写作，'ride'应改为'write'。

× I used to write in my daily life.

✓ I used to write in my daily life.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× Everything happened in my daily life.

✓ Everything that happens in my daily life.

时态应与上下文保持一致，描述习惯性动作应使用一般现在时。

× I would like to write it down to make a record or to share it.

✓ I would like to write it down to keep a record or to share it.

表达更自然，'make a record'通常用'keep a record'。

× I like to write down my moods or emotional in.

✓ I like to write down my moods or emotions.

'emotional'是形容词，需改为名词'emotions'，且'in'多余应删除。

× In when it come in my mind and I like to use some very beautiful words to describe my moods.

✓ When it comes to my mind, I like to use some very beautiful words to describe my moods.

句子结构混乱，'In when'应改为'When'，'come'应为第三人称单数'comes'。

× When it come in my mind

✓ When it comes to my mind

主语是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s。

× No, I don't think the things are right with change 'cause the thing I write is just the.

✓ No, I don't think the things are right to change because the things I write are just the.

'thing'和'things'使用不一致，应保持复数形式一致。

× Set an emotions that come to my mind and I like to write it down to express myself.

✓ Set of emotions that come to my mind, and I like to write them down to express myself.

'Set an emotions'应为'set of emotions'，且后面代词应与复数情绪一致用'them'。

× I like to him writing when I'm writing because I like to read my because I like to write on a boats or some journals so I can look back on, not just log back it on my phone.

✓ I like handwriting when I'm writing because I like to read my notes; I like to write in books or some journals so I can look back on them, not just log it on my phone.

原句中'him writing'错误，应为'handwriting'；'write on a boats'应为'write in books'；'look back on'后应有宾语'them'；'log back it'语序错误，应为'log it'。