写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“keep my salt down”应为“keep my thoughts clear”，且表达不够自然。建议使用更准确的表达，避免语法错误，并使句子更简洁流畅。

示例: I usually write reading journals to keep my thoughts clear. When I have too many emotions, I write them down to help me feel better.

建议: 回答中出现了词汇错误，如“organize my swords”应为“organize my thoughts”，“week dream trips”应为“weekend trips”，“playing trains”应为“playing trains”可能是“on trains”。建议注意词汇的准确性和表达的清晰度。

示例: As I mentioned, I enjoy writing reading journals because they help me organize my thoughts. I also like writing during weekend trips, especially when I'm on trains, as it feels like being the main character in a movie.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和词汇错误，如“it's depends”应为“it depends”，“identity goes”不明确，“die lines”应为“deadlines”。建议注意语法一致性和词汇准确性，表达更具体。

示例: Yes, definitely. What I write depends on my life stage. When I was in primary school, I wrote cheesy poems, but now I focus more on real-life topics, like my identity or venting about deadlines.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，如“is fast and easy to add it”应为“it's faster and easier to edit”，句子不完整“can slows me down and.”建议注意语法和句子完整性，使表达更自然流畅。

示例: For school work, I prefer typing because it's faster and easier to edit. However, for personal writing like journaling, I prefer handwriting because it slows me down and feels more personal in a good way.

× I usually write reading journals because I try to keep my salt down clearly.

✓ I usually write reading journals because I try to keep my thoughts down clearly.

这里'salt'用错了，应该是'thoughts'（想法）。'keep my salt down'没有意义，可能是拼写或用词错误。

× And when I have too much in my mind, I just to write down my emotions to solve them out.

✓ And when I have too much on my mind, I just write down my emotions to solve them.

'just to write'结构错误，应该是'just write'。'too much in my mind'应为'too much on my mind'，表示脑中有太多事情。'solve them out'表达不自然，改为'solve them'即可。

× Like I said, I really like writing, reading journals because they can organize my swords and also I have a unique habit which is I really enjoy writing during week dream trips, especially on playing trains.

✓ Like I said, I really like writing reading journals because they can organize my thoughts and also I have a unique habit which is I really enjoy writing during weekend trips, especially on playing trains.

'my swords'应为'my thoughts'，是拼写错误。'week dream trips'应为'weekend trips'，拼写错误。'on playing trains'应为'on playing trains'不合适，可能想表达'while riding trains'。

× It's like you are the main character in the movie.

✓ It's like you are the main character in a movie.

这里用定冠词'the'不合适，应该用不定冠词'a'，表示泛指电影中的主角。

× Like back in primary school there are some cheesy poems, but now it's more about real life, like identity goes or just venting about die lines.

✓ Like back in primary school there were some cheesy poems, but now it's more about real life, like identity issues or just venting about deadlines.

时态错误，过去时应使用'were'而非'are'。'identity goes'应为'identity issues'，拼写错误。'die lines'应为'deadlines'，拼写错误。

× For school stuff, typing is better, is fast and easy to add it.

✓ For school stuff, typing is better; it is fast and easy to edit.

缺少主语，'is fast'应为'it is fast'。'easy to add it'表达不准确，应该是'easy to edit'。

× But for personal stuff like journaling I actually prefer handwriting. It can slows me down and. A more personal, in a good way.

✓ But for personal stuff like journaling I actually prefer handwriting. It can slow me down and is more personal, in a good way.

'can slows'中动词形式错误，情态动词后应接动词原形'slow'。句子断裂，'A more personal'应改为'and is more personal'。