写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ không phù hợp (ví dụ: 'Switch makes me feel more motivated' không rõ nghĩa). Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

示例: Yes, I write regularly in my journal to record my life experiences. I usually write at the end of each month, so by the end of the year, I have a collection of memories that motivate me.

建议: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng chưa chính xác (ví dụ: 'ride out' không phù hợp, câu cuối bị bỏ dở). Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích cụ thể và dùng từ vựng phù hợp để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I like to write about my travel experiences because they create unforgettable memories with friends and locals. Writing these stories helps me remember those moments and inspires me to live a better life.

建议: Câu trả lời thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, câu không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn.

示例: Yes, the things I write change because each experience is unique. Different trips and people create different stories, depending on where I go and what I do.

建议: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng, gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt ý một cách mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me focus and feel more connected to my experiences. Writing on paper allows me to relive special moments more deeply.

× Switch makes me feel more motivated.

✓ Writing makes me feel more motivated.

The word 'Switch' is incorrect in this context; the student likely meant 'writing' or 'this activity'. Using the correct verb in the present participle form clarifies the meaning.

× I ride out my life experiences including the trips, the journeys that I have in my life.

✓ I write about my life experiences including the trips and journeys that I have in my life.

The phrase 'ride out' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'write about' to express recording experiences.

× I write them down as stories to remind me one day I will leave a better life and I.

✓ I write them down as stories to remind me that one day I will live a better life.

The sentence is incomplete and has structural errors. 'Leave a better life' is incorrect; it should be 'live a better life'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly and needs completion.

× Obviously, like everything I write down is unique, so because of my experience there are different.

✓ Obviously, everything I write down is unique because of my different experiences.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs restructuring to convey that the uniqueness comes from different experiences.

× So it depends on where to go and what to do and also when I'm gonna have different stories.

✓ So it depends on where I go, what I do, and also when I have different stories.

The phrase 'depends on where to go' is incorrect; it should be 'depends on where I go'. Also, 'gonna' is informal and should be replaced with 'going to' or simply 'have' in this context.

× I do both, but I prefer handwriting more is simply because I feel like the time I write down, the time I sketch on paper mess me, dive deeper and immerse myself in the experience.

✓ I do both, but I prefer handwriting more simply because I feel like the time I write down and sketch on paper helps me dive deeper and immerse myself in the experience.

The pronoun 'mess me' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'helps me'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and needs correction for clarity.

× Is it just like the time I can one more time relieve in the moment that I have gone through?

✓ It's just like I can relive the moment I have gone through one more time.

The sentence is awkward and incorrectly structured. The corrected sentence clearly expresses the intended meaning of reliving past moments.