写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答不够自然流畅，句子结构混乱，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用连贯的句子表达原因。

示例: No, I don't write a lot. I usually write down important things to remind myself later.

建议: 回答内容混乱，有语法错误和不连贯的表达。建议明确表达喜欢写什么，并用连贯的句子说明原因。

示例: I like to write down my daily tasks because it helps me organize my work and finish important things first.

建议: 表达不够清晰，语法错误较多。建议用简单句表达观点，并用具体例子说明写作内容会随情绪变化而改变。

示例: Yes, the things I write often change because they reflect my feelings, which can be different from day to day.

建议: 回答较为完整，但有重复和语法错误。建议避免重复，使用更准确的表达。

示例: I prefer handwriting because holding a pen and writing on paper makes me feel relaxed and focused.

× And no, I don't write a lot.

✓ No, I don't write a lot.

句首不应使用连词“and”，应直接回答问题。

× Sometimes when something really important strikes me, I will write it down on us taking notes.

✓ Sometimes when something really important strikes me, I will write it down by taking notes.

介词使用错误，“on us taking notes”应改为“by taking notes”，表示通过做笔记的方式。

× To be a reminder of me.

✓ To remind myself.

句子结构不完整，应使用不定式短语“to remind myself”表达目的。

× I like to write down the important task of the day to remind myself by doing this.

✓ I like to write down the important tasks of the day to remind myself; by doing this,

“task”应为复数“tasks”，且句子结构不完整，需调整连接词和标点。

× I like to write down the important task of the day to remind myself by doing this.

✓ I like to write down the important tasks of the day to remind myself by doing this.

“task”应为复数形式“tasks”，因为指的是多项任务。

× I can finish prioritize task in an organized way.

✓ I can finish and prioritize tasks in an organized way.

缺少连词，且“prioritize”应为动词，需加“and”连接，且“task”应为复数。

× Wizards.

✓ I feel less anxious.

“Wizards”无意义，应改为表达情绪的完整句子。

× Anxious about So what you need to do first?

✓ I feel anxious about what I need to do first.

句子结构混乱，应调整为完整陈述句。

× Yes they will change because the thing I write other spontaneous overflow of my current feeling.

✓ Yes, they will change because the things I write are spontaneous overflow of my current feelings.

“thing”应为复数“things”，“feeling”应为复数“feelings”，且缺少动词“are”。

× Yes they will change because the thing I write other spontaneous overflow of my current feeling.

✓ Yes, they will change because the things I write are spontaneous overflow of my current feelings.

缺少系动词“are”，导致句子不完整。

× As time goes by my current feeling would change, so do the same.

✓ As time goes by, my current feelings change, and so do the things I write.

“would change”应改为一般现在时“change”，且“so do the same”表达不清，应具体说明。

× I prefer handwriting because I really enjoyed the process of holding hands and writing on a piece of paper as this whole process make me feel relaxed and I really enjoyed this process.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I really enjoy the process of holding a pen and writing on a piece of paper, as this whole process makes me feel relaxed and I really enjoy it.

“holding hands”应为“holding a pen”，动词时态应统一为现在时，“make”应为“makes”，避免重复表达。