写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“wanna write aloud”应为“want to write a lot”，并且句子结构不完整。建议简化句子结构，避免口语化缩写，注意时态和语法的正确使用。

示例: I don't write much now because I am busy, but I used to write a lot of stories about myself in high school. Writing helps me relax.

建议: 回答中表达不够清晰，句子不完整且有语法错误。建议使用完整句子，明确表达原因，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

示例: I like to write fiction based on my daily life because it helps me remember what happened and gives me a chance to record my experiences.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，注意主谓一致，避免重复，并清楚表达观点。

示例: I don't think my writing habits will change because I have been writing like this for about six years, and changing it would make me uncomfortable.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然的问题。建议使用正确的词汇，如“handwriting”而非“hand writing”，并且句子应完整且连贯。

示例: I prefer handwriting because I didn't have devices to type in the past, so I got used to writing on paper, and I still prefer it now.

× Currently I do not wanna write aloud because I don't have much time and energy to do these kind of things but in the past, especially in my high school and I wrote a lot of.

✓ Currently I do not want to write aloud because I don't have much time and energy to do these kinds of things but in the past, especially in my high school, I wrote a lot.

wanna是口语缩写形式，正式写作中应使用want to；'these kind of things'中'kind'应为复数形式'kinds'或使用复数'do these kinds of things'，这里改为'kinds'的复数形式。

× Currently I do not wanna write aloud because I don't have much time and energy to do these kind of things but in the past, especially in my high school and I wrote a lot of.

✓ Currently I do not want to write aloud because I don't have much time and energy to do these kinds of things but in the past, especially in my high school, I wrote a lot.

'these kind of things'中'kind'应为复数形式'kinds'，因为'these'指复数，名词也应保持复数一致。

× Currently I do not wanna write aloud because I don't have much time and energy to do these kind of things but in the past, especially in my high school and I wrote a lot of.

✓ Currently I do not want to write aloud because I don't have much time and energy to do these kinds of things but in the past, especially in my high school, I wrote a lot.

原句中'and I wrote a lot of'结构不完整，缺少宾语，且连接词使用不当，需调整句子结构使其完整通顺。

× I will relax when I am right.

✓ I will relax when I am writing.

'right'应为'writing'的误拼，表示正在写作时放松，需用动词现在分词形式。

× I like to write some fictions about my daily lives 'cause now I suppose it is a good way to help me to recall the things I faced in some days and.

✓ I like to write some fiction about my daily life because now I suppose it is a good way to help me recall the things I faced in some days.

'fictions'通常不可数，表示虚构作品时用单数形式'fiction'；'daily lives'应为单数'daily life'，指日常生活。

× I like to write some fictions about my daily lives 'cause now I suppose it is a good way to help me to recall the things I faced in some days and.

✓ I like to write some fiction about my daily life because now I suppose it is a good way to help me recall the things I faced in some days.

句尾的'and'连接词使用不当，导致句子不完整，应去掉。

× I don't think this things I write will change because I already had this habit.

✓ I don't think these things I write will change because I already have this habit.

'this things'中'do'和'things'数不一致，应改为'these things'。

× I don't think this things I write will change because I already had this habit.

✓ I don't think these things I write will change because I already have this habit.

'already had'时态不合适，表示现在仍有此习惯，应使用现在完成时或现在时。

× Uh, so it would makes me feel very uncomfortable if I have to change this, that this habit that I have formed a about six years.

✓ Uh, so it would make me feel very uncomfortable if I have to change this habit that I have formed about six years ago.

'would makes'中动词应为原形'make'；'a about'多余冠词'a'；'about six years'后应加时间状语'ago'。

× Uh, so it would makes me feel very uncomfortable if I have to change this, that this habit that I have formed a about six years.

✓ Uh, so it would make me feel very uncomfortable if I have to change this habit that I have formed about six years ago.

句中重复使用'this'，应去掉多余的一个，保持句子简洁。

× I prefer to do it by hand writing.

✓ I prefer to do it by handwriting.

'hand writing'应合成一个词'handwriting'，表示手写。

× In. Because in the past I don't have any devices for me to typing so I just do some writings on the papers and that habit is lasting too now.

✓ Because in the past I didn't have any devices for me to type, so I just did some writing on paper and that habit is lasting until now.

'don't have'应为过去时'didn't have'；'to typing'应为'to type'；'do some writings'应为'did some writing'；'on the papers'改为'on paper'更自然；'lasting too now'表达不准确，改为'lasting until now'。