写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 내용이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 불필요한 반복을 피하며, 문법과 어휘 사용에 주의해야 합니다.

示例: Yes, I write a lot. I usually keep a diary and sometimes write letters to my sons. Writing is my hobby, and I enjoy it very much.

建议: 답변이 매우 불명확하고 문법적 오류가 많아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 구체적인 이유와 예시를 들어 내용을 풍부하게 해야 합니다.

示例: I like to write about my life experiences, especially my spiritual journey as a Christian. Writing helps me reflect on my relationship with God.

建议: 답변이 다소 어색하고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하고, 변화에 대한 구체적인 설명을 추가하면 좋겠습니다.

示例: Yes, my writing has changed. In the past, I often wrote about gloomy or sad feelings, but now my writing is more cheerful and positive.

建议: 답변이 매우 불명확하고 문법적으로 맞지 않는 부분이 많습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 이유를 명확하게 설명하며, 문장을 간결하게 구성해야 합니다.

示例: I prefer typing because it is faster and more convenient. Although I used to write by hand, now I mostly use my computer.

× I write my diary or lilies of my sons.

✓ I write in my diary or letters to my sons.

The phrase 'lilies of my sons' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'letters to my sons'. The pronoun usage and noun choice are incorrect here, so it should be corrected to 'letters to my sons' to make sense.

× I really enjoy writing because of it's my hobby an I'm at.

✓ I really enjoy writing because it's my hobby and I'm good at it.

The phrase 'because of it's my hobby an I'm at' is grammatically incorrect. 'Because of' should be followed by a noun, but here it is followed by a clause. Also, 'I'm at' is incomplete. The correct form is 'because it's my hobby and I'm good at it.'

× I write my diary or lilies of my sons.

✓ I write in my diary or letters to my sons.

The sentence structure is awkward and unclear. 'Write my diary' should be 'write in my diary' and 'lilies of my sons' is incorrect. Correcting the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I really enjoy writing because of it's my hobby an I'm at.

✓ I really enjoy writing because it's my hobby and I'm good at it.

The pronoun 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is' and should not be preceded by 'of'. Also, 'I'm at' is incomplete and should be 'I'm good at it' to complete the thought.

× What do you like to write? Why?

✓ What do you like to write? Why?

No grammatical error detected in this sentence.

× I usually write too.

✓ I usually write as well.

The use of 'too' at the end is informal and can be replaced with 'as well' for better clarity and formality.

× About right about the experience of my life.

✓ I usually write about the experiences of my life.

The phrase 'About right about' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'about' and 'right' is unnecessary here. Also, 'experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match the context.

× Some episodes about my lives about my life of the as a Christian between God and me were some different to experience.

✓ Some episodes about my life as a Christian, between God and me, were different experiences.

The sentence is confusing with repeated phrases and incorrect pronouns. 'My lives about my life' is redundant. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun usage.

× With other.

✓ With others.

The phrase 'With other' is incomplete and should be 'With others' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, it changes already.

✓ Yes, it has already changed.

The present tense 'changes' is incorrect here because the action is completed. The present perfect tense 'has already changed' is appropriate to indicate a change that has occurred.

× Before long time ago I wrote to something really gloomy or depressed.

✓ A long time ago, I wrote about something really gloomy or depressing.

The phrase 'Before long time ago' is incorrect; it should be 'A long time ago'. Also, 'wrote to something' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'about'. 'Depressed' should be 'depressing' to describe the content.

× It was always Moody, but nowadays is delighted and bright.

✓ It was always moody, but nowadays it is delightful and bright.

'Moody' should not be capitalized. 'Delighted' is an adjective describing a person, but here the writing is described, so 'delightful' is more appropriate. Also, the subject 'it' is missing before 'is'.

× More than before.

✓ It is more than before.

The phrase 'More than before' is a fragment and needs a subject and verb to be a complete sentence.

× I preferred type.

✓ I prefer typing.

The past tense 'preferred' is incorrect here because the student is expressing a current preference. Also, 'type' should be 'typing' to indicate the action.

× In the past, I prepared.

✓ In the past, I used to write by hand.

The sentence 'I prepared' is incomplete and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'I used to write by hand' or 'I used to prepare handwritten work'.

× Did too.

✓ I did too.

The sentence fragment 'Did too' is incomplete. Adding the subject 'I' makes it a complete sentence.

× Right hand writing because it was more comfortable nowadays.

✓ Handwriting because it was more comfortable back then.

'Right hand writing' is incorrect; it should be 'handwriting'. Also, 'nowadays' contradicts 'was' (past tense). 'Back then' is appropriate for past time reference.

× I usually use my computer, I mean my wrapped up so.

✓ I usually use my computer, I mean my laptop, so...

The phrase 'my wrapped up so' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'my laptop'. The sentence is corrected to reflect the intended meaning.