写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan agak membingungkan karena ada pengulangan dan kalimat yang tidak lengkap. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang lebih langsung dan terstruktur dengan baik, hindari pengulangan dan gunakan kalimat yang lengkap.

示例: No, I don't write a lot. I usually write only when I need to learn something new or take notes about things I don't know.

建议: Jawaban Anda kurang fokus dan tidak jelas. Anda perlu menjawab langsung pertanyaan dengan kalimat yang terstruktur dan memberikan alasan yang jelas. Hindari kalimat yang tidak relevan atau tidak lengkap.

示例: I like to write about my feelings and sometimes I describe my husband. I also write tips about using iOS because I enjoy sharing useful information.

建议: Jawaban Anda mengandung beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa dan kalimat yang tidak jelas. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide dengan baik.

示例: I don't think what I write will change much over time. However, writing helps me improve my mood and cope with stressful situations by organizing my thoughts.

建议: Jawaban Anda cukup baik tetapi ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa dan kalimat yang kurang jelas. Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan gunakan kata-kata yang tepat untuk menjelaskan alasan Anda dengan lebih jelas.

示例: I prefer handwriting to typing because it helps me feel more connected to the information. For example, I can remember what I wrote more easily, which helps me learn better.

× No, this I don't really write a lot because, uh, I need to, I write a lot, of course, uh, sometimes, but not really a because I need to learn about this.

✓ No, I don't really write a lot because I need to learn about this, although sometimes I do write a lot.

The original sentence is confusing and contains redundant and misplaced phrases, making it difficult to understand. Simplifying and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and coherence.

× I also, I need to write a lot of things that I didn't know before.

✓ I also need to write a lot of things that I didn't know before.

The comma after 'I also' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow. Removing it corrects the prepositional use and improves sentence fluency.

× Uh, sometimes I write about how I feel right now and then about describing about my husband or about the tips of the iOS.

✓ Sometimes I write about how I feel right now, then about describing my husband or about tips for iOS.

The phrase 'about describing about' is incorrect; 'about' should not be repeated. Also, 'tips of the iOS' should be 'tips for iOS' to correctly express the relationship.

× Best floor about listening test, Yeah.

✓ I also write about the best strategies for the listening test.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Rewriting it to a complete sentence clarifies the intended meaning.

× I don't think I write would change much overtime.

✓ I don't think what I write would change much over time.

The phrase 'I write would change' is incorrect; it should be 'what I write would change'. Also, 'overtime' should be two words 'over time' when referring to a period.

× However writing can definitely influence my mood and help me cope with different situation or visible when I feel stressed or writing down my thought that helps me will camera and more focused.

✓ However, writing can definitely influence my mood and help me cope with different situations, especially when I feel stressed. Writing down my thoughts helps me calm down and stay more focused.

The original sentence has multiple errors including missing commas, incorrect singular/plural forms, and unclear phrases like 'visible' and 'will camera'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I prefer writing rather than typing because when I write my hand I feel more connected to the information.

✓ I prefer writing rather than typing because when I write by hand, I feel more connected to the information.

The phrase 'write my hand' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'by' in 'write by hand'.

× For example, I can remember what I wrote more easily, which helps me that learn better auto.

✓ For example, I can remember what I wrote more easily, which helps me learn better automatically.

The phrase 'helps me that learn better auto' is incorrect. It should be 'helps me learn better automatically' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Sometimes I forget some details and writing still helps me certain information more effectively than 10 typing.

✓ Sometimes I forget some details, and writing still helps me remember certain information more effectively than typing.

The phrase 'helps me certain information' is missing a verb like 'remember'. Also, '10 typing' seems to be a typo and should be 'than typing'.