写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to form complete sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: I don't write very often because I prefer speaking and listening. However, recently, while preparing for my IELTS exam, I had to write more frequently since it was compulsory to do so.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant or confusing information. Focus on directly answering the question with specific details and avoid unrelated phrases. Use linking words to organize your ideas.

示例: I like to write about the activities I have done during the day because it helps me remember important events and improve my writing skills.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting minor grammatical errors and using linking words to enhance coherence.

示例: Yes, my writing has definitely evolved gradually. When I was a child, I used to write simple stories, but now I prefer writing more complex ones because I have gained more knowledge and skills.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains some awkward phrasing and minor errors. Try to use more natural expressions and linking words to improve flow.

示例: To be honest, I prefer typing rather than handwriting because it's easier to make corrections without creating a mess. Also, I find writing on paper quite difficult and sometimes uncomfortable.

× To be honest, I don't write. Very frequent because I prefer speaking and listening rather than writing it on a paper.

✓ To be honest, I don't write very frequently because I prefer speaking and listening rather than writing on paper.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper connection between ideas. 'Very frequent' is not a complete sentence and should be combined with the previous sentence to form a coherent statement. Also, 'writing it on a paper' is incorrect; 'writing on paper' is the correct phrase.

× However, recently while I was preparing for my Isles exam, I used to write instead of just listing the main points because it was compulsorily to do so.

✓ However, recently while I was preparing for my Isles exam, I had to write instead of just listing the main points because it was compulsory to do so.

The phrase 'used to write' implies a habitual past action, which is not appropriate here. 'Had to write' correctly expresses obligation. Also, 'compulsorily' is an adverb, but the adjective 'compulsory' is needed to describe 'to do so'.

× I like to write a different kinds of things that I have done in a day and also I like to write.

✓ I like to write about different kinds of things that I have done in a day, and I also like to write about topics I don't understand.

The phrase 'a different kinds' is incorrect because 'kinds' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'about' clarifies the meaning. The second part was unclear and has been rephrased for clarity.

× Who is Sans, which I don't understand of a topic.

✓ I write about topics I don't understand, such as 'Sans'.

The original sentence is unclear and incorrectly uses 'Who' and 'which'. It seems the student intended to mention a topic they don't understand. Rephrasing clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun usage.

× Yes, definitely my writing will evolve a gradually because when I was a child I used to write simple stories but now I prefer writing more complex ones.

✓ Yes, definitely my writing will gradually evolve because when I was a child I used to write simple stories, but now I prefer writing more complex ones.

The adverb 'gradually' is misplaced. It should be placed before the verb 'evolve' to correctly modify it. Also, a comma is needed before 'but' to separate the clauses.

× To be honest, I prefer typing rather than writing it on a paper because I can do corrections without making any mess on it.

✓ To be honest, I prefer typing rather than writing on paper because I can make corrections without making any mess.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect after 'writing' and 'making any mess'. Also, 'do corrections' is better expressed as 'make corrections'. 'On a paper' should be 'on paper'.

× Moreover, I think writing on paper is too hard and I feel it as a painful.

✓ Moreover, I think writing on paper is too hard and I find it painful.

The phrase 'I feel it as a painful' is incorrect. 'Painful' is an adjective and should be used without 'a' and 'as'. The correct expression is 'I find it painful' or 'I feel pain'.