写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to start with a direct response to the question, then add specific details without redundancy. Also, avoid grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'I'm a beard' and 'write Lord related'.

示例: Yes, I write quite a lot because I am a university student and often have to complete assignments. Besides academic writing, I enjoy writing diaries and personal stories during my free time.

建议: Your answer should be more organized and clear. Start with a topic sentence, then explain the two types of writing you do, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrases and improve sentence structure.

示例: I like to write two main types of content. Firstly, I write academic assignments that require research and careful preparation. Secondly, in my free time, I enjoy writing various stories, which I sometimes publish on social media.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and logically, using linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid confusing phrases and focus on specific examples.

示例: Yes, the type of writing I do changes depending on my career stage and current interests. For example, as an undergraduate student, I focus on educational articles, but during my postgraduate studies, I wrote mainly scientific papers.

建议: Your answer should be more concise and clear. Start with your preference, then explain why typing is necessary now, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid awkward phrases and improve sentence flow.

示例: I prefer handwriting because I find it more personal and comfortable. However, since most assignments require digital submission, I often have to type my work on a laptop.

× Is I have a habit of writing a lot as I'm a beard, a student from university, I have to write Lord related to my assignments and I like to spend my time writing.

✓ I have a habit of writing a lot as I'm a beard, a student from university. I have to write a lot related to my assignments and I like to spend my time writing.

The sentence incorrectly starts with 'Is I' which is not grammatically correct. The correct subject pronoun 'I' should be used without 'Is'. Also, 'Lord' seems to be a typo for 'a lot'. The sentence is also a run-on and should be split for clarity.

× Whenever I get free time, I like to write Diaries, stories of myself like that.

✓ Whenever I get free time, I like to write diaries and stories about myself.

The word 'Diaries' should not be capitalized unless it is a title. Also, 'stories of myself like that' is awkward; 'stories about myself' is clearer and more natural.

× I like to write two different things, first is depends on my education that I have to research more and write tomorrow and to submit mother assignment in character date and the second one I have to write whenever I get free time.

✓ I like to write two different things. The first depends on my education, where I have to research more and write reports to submit my assignments by the due date. The second is writing whenever I get free time.

The original sentence is a run-on with unclear phrases like 'write tomorrow' and 'mother assignment in character date'. It needs to be split into clearer sentences with correct vocabulary and structure.

× I like to write different kinds of stories. I have a hobby of writing too much of stories and publish it in some social media.

✓ I like to write different kinds of stories. I have a hobby of writing many stories and publishing them on social media.

'Too much of stories' is incorrect; 'many stories' is appropriate for countable nouns. Also, 'publish it' should be 'publishing them' to agree with the plural 'stories'. 'On social media' is the correct preposition.

× Yes, of course the writing depends on over carrier and the current situation.

✓ Yes, of course, the writing depends on my career and the current situation.

'Over carrier' is incorrect; it should be 'my career'. Also, commas are needed after 'Yes' and 'of course' for correct punctuation.

× Now it is I'm focusing more on their articles related to educational sign my beard student.

✓ Now, I am focusing more on articles related to education as a beard student.

The phrase 'their articles related to educational sign my beard student' is unclear and incorrect. It should be 'articles related to education as a beard student'. Also, 'I'm' should be 'I am' for clarity, and commas are needed.

× But when I'm a postgraduate students in science miles writing was fully focused on scientific things and scientific subjects like that.

✓ But when I was a postgraduate student in science, my writing was fully focused on scientific topics and subjects.

'I'm a postgraduate students' is incorrect; it should be 'I was a postgraduate student' to match singular subject and past tense. 'Science miles' is likely a typo for 'science', and 'scientific things' is better expressed as 'scientific topics'.

× And it is depends on perspective and current scenario what we are knowing.

✓ And it depends on perspective and the current situation based on what we know.

'It is depends' is incorrect; it should be 'it depends'. 'Current scenario' is better as 'current situation'. 'What we are knowing' is incorrect; 'what we know' is correct.

× Actually I like to prefer writing with my hand, but now it exists most preferable of the digital copy of most of the things.

✓ Actually, I prefer writing by hand, but now digital copies are more preferable for most things.

'I like to prefer' is redundant; 'I prefer' is sufficient. 'Writing with my hand' should be 'writing by hand'. The phrase 'it exists most preferable of the digital copy' is incorrect and should be rephrased.

× That's why we are forced to write everything by typing.

✓ That's why we are forced to type everything.

'Write everything by typing' is wordy; 'type everything' is clearer and more natural.

× Even I have to submit my assignment a soft copy of the assignment.

✓ I even have to submit a soft copy of my assignment.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'Even I have to submit my assignment a soft copy' should be 'I even have to submit a soft copy of my assignment' for clarity and correct word order.

× That's why I have to type on my laptop, even though I like to write by my own hand.

✓ That's why I have to type on my laptop, even though I like to write by my own hand.

This sentence is grammatically correct but could be improved by changing 'by my own hand' to 'by hand' for naturalness. However, since it does not violate the listed grammar problem types, no correction is made.