写作— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Do you write a lot?
考生
I'm before I never used to write up. And Lord bad nowadays I should shoot it to write a lot. Because someone said to me if you write a lot, your dream comes through the data and start now. I tried to write down all my.
考官
What do you like to write? Why?
考生
I like to write down my dreams because in in my head I have a very many dreams so I usually write how to be flight attendant. And so.
考官
Do you think the things you write would change?
考生
Definitely yes, I usually change my dreams because sometimes you need to run, you need to write down too or no, No 10 or 20 and dreams an alert. Maybe you need to change the you need, you have to change your dreams.
考官
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
考生
I search is an handwriting because I'm not good at typing so I have been big notes to my dreams and that's why I usually use handwriting. It's easier than typing I'm so that's all.
评估
总分
Part 1
Do you write a lot?
分数: 40.0建议: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и понятным. Следует избегать грамматических ошибок и неясных выражений. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и старайтесь отвечать прямо на вопрос, не уходя в лишние детали.
示例: I didn't use to write much before, but now I write a lot because I believe it helps me achieve my dreams. I try to write down my thoughts and goals regularly.
What do you like to write? Why?
分数: 45.0建议: Ответ должен быть более полным и связным. Следует использовать более точную лексику и избегать повторов. Добавьте объяснение, почему именно вы пишете о своих мечтах.
示例: I like to write down my dreams because I have many ideas in my mind. For example, I often write about my goal to become a flight attendant, which motivates me to work hard.
Do you think the things you write would change?
分数: 35.0建议: Ответ должен быть более ясным и логичным. Избегайте путаных фраз и повторов. Объясните, почему ваши мечты могут меняться, используя связующие слова.
示例: Yes, I think my dreams change over time because as I grow, my interests and priorities evolve. Therefore, I update my goals to reflect my current aspirations.
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
分数: 40.0建议: Ответ должен быть более грамматически правильным и структурированным. Объясните причину предпочтения и используйте связующие слова для плавности речи.
示例: I prefer handwriting because I'm not very good at typing. Writing by hand helps me remember my dreams better and it's easier for me to organize my thoughts.
语法
× I'm before I never used to write up.
✓ Before, I never used to write.
The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I'm before' which is not a proper expression. The correct phrase is 'Before, I never used to write.' This corrects the tense and word order to express past habits.
× And Lord bad nowadays I should shoot it to write a lot.
✓ And nowadays I should try to write a lot.
The phrase 'Lord bad' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo. 'Should shoot it' is incorrect; the correct modal verb phrase is 'should try to'. The preposition 'to' is correctly used after 'try'.
× Because someone said to me if you write a lot, your dream comes through the data and start now.
✓ Because someone told me that if you write a lot, your dreams come true, so I started now.
The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Dream comes through the data' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'dreams come true'. Also, 'start now' should be 'I started now' or 'I am starting now' to maintain tense consistency.
× I tried to write down all my.
✓ I tried to write down all my dreams.
The sentence is incomplete; it ends abruptly after 'all my'. Adding 'dreams' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.
× I like to write down my dreams because in in my head I have a very many dreams so I usually write how to be flight attendant.
✓ I like to write down my dreams because in my head I have many dreams, so I usually write about how to be a flight attendant.
The phrase 'in in' is a repetition error. 'Very many' is incorrect; 'many' alone is sufficient. 'Write how to be flight attendant' lacks the preposition 'about' and the article 'a' before 'flight attendant'.
× I have a very many dreams
✓ I have many dreams
The quantifier 'very many' is incorrect in English. The correct quantifier is simply 'many' without 'very'.
× I usually write how to be flight attendant.
✓ I usually write about how to be a flight attendant.
The noun 'flight attendant' requires the indefinite article 'a' when singular and unspecified. Also, the verb 'write' needs the preposition 'about' to indicate the topic.
× sometimes you need to run, you need to write down too or no, No 10 or 20 and dreams an alert.
✓ sometimes you need to run, you need to write down too, or no, no 10 or 20 dreams alert.
The sentence is unclear and contains pronoun misuse and unclear phrases. It likely intends to say that sometimes you need to write down 10 or 20 dreams. The phrase 'dreams an alert' is unclear and may be a transcription error.
× Maybe you need to change the you need, you have to change your dreams.
✓ Maybe you need to change; you have to change your dreams.
The phrase 'change the you need' is incorrect and confusing. Removing 'the you need' clarifies the sentence.
× I search is an handwriting because I'm not good at typing so I have been big notes to my dreams and that's why I usually use handwriting.
✓ I prefer handwriting because I'm not good at typing, so I have big notes of my dreams, and that's why I usually use handwriting.
'I search is an handwriting' is incorrect; 'I prefer handwriting' is correct. 'Big notes to my dreams' should be 'big notes of my dreams' to use the correct preposition.
× It's easier than typing I'm so that's all.
✓ It's easier than typing, so that's all.
The phrase 'I'm so that's all' is incorrect. It should be 'so that's all' to connect the ideas properly.
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