花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains unclear phrases such as "the great Emma." To improve, try to be more concise and clear, avoid redundancy, and use appropriate vocabulary. Also, ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and coherent.

示例: Yes, I love flowers, especially tulips, roses, and daisies. I enjoy their beautiful colours and the pleasant fragrance they bring, which brightens up any room.

建议: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly awkward in phrasing. To improve, try to use linking words for coherence and simplify sentences for clarity. Also, avoid unnecessary repetition.

示例: Yes, my mother loves flowers. She buys fresh flowers every week to decorate our home, which creates a pleasant fragrance and a cheerful atmosphere that helps me relax.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but contains some informal language and minor grammatical errors. To improve, use more formal and precise language, and organise your ideas clearly with linking words.

示例: There are not many flowers where I live because I live in an apartment near the city centre, which is mostly urban with few green spaces. However, people can easily buy flowers from local shops.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains several grammatical mistakes and awkward phrases. To improve, focus on clarity, avoid filler words like "you know," and structure your sentences logically with appropriate linking words.

示例: I don't take photos of flowers very often, but sometimes I do to capture their beauty. It helps me relax and appreciate the present moment.

建议: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases, which affect understanding. To improve, use correct sentence structures, avoid confusing words, and provide clear examples with linking words.

示例: Yes, in China, it is common to send flowers on special occasions. For example, on Valentine's Day, boys often give roses to girls to show their affection. Flowers are also given on Teachers' Day to express gratitude.

× I particularly love the scent of the flower to fragrance of it as well as how it looks to add to the great Emma.

✓ I particularly love the scent or fragrance of the flower as well as how it looks, which adds to the great ambiance.

The phrase 'scent of the flower to fragrance of it' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'or' to indicate alternatives, and 'adds to the great Emma' is unclear and likely a mishearing of 'ambiance'. Also, 'to add to' should be 'which adds to' to correctly link the clause.

× I will like to name my mom because she often brings flowers from stores on a weekly basis to decorate my home and indeed it is a great way to add to the fragrance as well as cheerful atmosphere at home where I can feel more relaxing.

✓ I would like to name my mom because she often brings flowers from stores on a weekly basis to decorate my home, and indeed it is a great way to add fragrance as well as a cheerful atmosphere at home where I can feel more relaxed.

The modal verb 'will' is incorrectly used here; 'would like' is the correct polite expression for desire. Also, 'feel more relaxing' should be 'feel more relaxed' because 'relaxing' describes something that causes relaxation, while 'relaxed' describes the feeling of the person.

× Well honestly there aren't too many flowers where I live because I live in apartment with my parents close to city center, so the surroundings are usually the typical urban you know site without any public green areas.

✓ Well honestly there aren't too many flowers where I live because I live in an apartment with my parents close to the city center, so the surroundings are usually the typical urban site without any public green areas.

The noun 'apartment' is singular and requires the indefinite article 'an'. Also, 'city center' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place.

× However, people can reach out to the flower stores to get flowers.

✓ However, people can go to the flower stores to get flowers.

The phrase 'reach out to' is generally used for contacting someone, not physically going somewhere. The correct phrase here is 'go to'.

× Well, I wouldn't say I take photos of flowers in my daily life super frequently, but I occasionally do so probably because I really want to capture the, you know, studying moments of those flowers.

✓ Well, I wouldn't say I take photos of flowers in my daily life very frequently, but I occasionally do so probably because I really want to capture the, you know, stunning moments of those flowers.

The adverb 'super' is informal and not appropriate here; 'very' is better. Also, 'studying moments' is likely a mishearing or misuse; 'stunning moments' fits better in context.

× And I think it is a pretty good way for me to feel relax and focus on their presence instead of the welling order past will visualizing the future.

✓ And I think it is a pretty good way for me to feel relaxed and focus on their presence instead of dwelling on the past or visualizing the future.

The verb 'feel' should be followed by the adjective 'relaxed' not the base verb 'relax'. Also, 'welling order past will' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'dwelling on the past or'.

× Well, I think in China it is actually a common and popular choice. Dissent flowers to others on some special occasions.

✓ Well, I think in China it is actually a common and popular choice to send flowers to others on some special occasions.

The word 'Dissent' is a mishearing or typo for 'send'. Also, the sentence fragment 'Dissent flowers to others on some special occasions.' lacks a subject and verb agreement; it should be combined with the previous sentence for clarity.

× For instance, during Valentine's Day, boys usually stands Bros is 2 girls to express the appreciation and affection to the girls.

✓ For instance, during Valentine's Day, boys usually stand roses to girls to express appreciation and affection to the girls.

The verb 'stands' should be 'stand' to agree with the plural subject 'boys'. 'Bros is 2 girls' is a mishearing; the correct phrase is 'roses to girls'. Also, 'the appreciation' should be 'appreciation' without 'the'.