家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời cần trực tiếp và chính xác hơn, tránh thông tin thừa và sai ngữ pháp. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn nêu vị trí rồi bổ sung tối đa 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ (ví dụ: tỉnh/thành phố, khoảng cách/ thời gian bay). Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như “around 8 hour” → “about an eight-hour flight”.

示例: My hometown is Hanoi, Vietnam. It’s in Southeast Asia and takes about an eight-hour flight from Australia.

建议: Cần trả lời mạch lạc với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh filler như “umm” và lỗi số nhiều/động từ. Hạn chế liệt kê dài không liên kết; nên dùng từ nối (for example, also, because) và cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về món ăn hoặc thời tiết. Viết chính xác: “There are many reasons” và “my family lives here”.

示例: I like my hometown mainly because of the local food. For example, the street noodles and fresh seafood are excellent, and the mild climate makes it pleasant year-round.

建议: Cần dùng thì và cấu trúc đúng để trả lời về khoảng thời gian. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề sử dụng hiện tại hoàn thành hoặc quá khứ đơn tùy ngữ cảnh: “I lived there for 26 years” hoặc “I had lived there for 26 years before I moved”. Thêm liên từ để liên kết hai ý rõ hơn.

示例: I lived in my hometown for about 26 years before I moved abroad to work and study.

建议: Câu trả lời hiện không rõ ý và có lỗi logic/ngữ pháp. Cần nêu quan điểm rõ ràng kèm lý do cụ thể và dẫn chứng. Sử dụng cấu trúc: topic sentence + vì sao + ví dụ. Sửa lỗi: “can make more money than the people” không rõ nghĩa; có thể muốn nói “there are fewer job opportunities” hoặc “salaries are lower”. Dùng từ vựng phù hợp như job opportunities, salaries, education, cost of living.

示例: I don’t think it’s ideal for young people because there are fewer high-paying job opportunities. As a result, many young people move overseas to find better-paid work and study options.

× There's so many reason for that questions.

✓ There are so many reasons for that question.

The phrase 'There is' contracts to 'There's' which is singular; use 'There are' for plural, and 'reason' should be plural 'reasons'. Also 'questions' should be singular 'question' because speaker refers to one question asked. Suggestion: use 'There are' + plural noun when referencing multiple items.

× My hometown is in Vietnam, it's located in Asia and I have to take a plane around 8 hour from Australia to my hometown.

✓ My hometown is in Vietnam, which is in Asia, and I have to take a plane for about 8 hours from Australia to get home.

Use a relative clause 'which is in Asia' for clarity. Time durations require 'for about 8 hours' and the noun 'hour' must be plural. Also include a verb 'get' or 'travel' to indicate movement. Suggestion: use 'for about X hours' for duration and pluralize 'hour'.

× I live in my hometown around 26 years, so after that I moved to another country for working and studying.

✓ I lived in my hometown for about 26 years, and then I moved to another country to work and study.

Tense consistency: use past tense 'lived' and 'moved' for completed actions. Use 'for about 26 years' to indicate duration. Use infinitive 'to work and study' instead of 'for working and studying'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense and use 'to' + verb for purpose.

× I like, umm, food from my hometown and the weather as well and my family's living here, so that is the main reason.

✓ I like the food from my hometown, the weather, and the fact that my family lives here, so that is the main reason.

Use definite article 'the' before 'food' when speaking generally about a specific hometown. 'My family's living here' is better expressed as 'my family lives here' for clarity; use singular verb 'lives' with collective noun 'family'. Also list items with commas. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific items and correct verb agreement with collective nouns.

× I think it's not good for young people because it can make more money than the people. The young people live oversea because it's cheaper.

✓ I don't think it is good for young people because they can earn more money elsewhere. Young people live overseas because it is cheaper.

The original sentences misuse 'it' and 'the people' and incorrect comparative phrasing. Use 'they can earn more money elsewhere' to indicate people in other countries, and 'overseas' (one word) for abroad. Use 'it is' contracted to 'it's' optionally; ensure pronouns match antecedents. Suggestion: use 'earn' for making money, 'elsewhere' or 'overseas' for location, and maintain pronoun consistency.