家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer wa ni eigo de shizen de wakariyasuku shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'My hometown is Gal Good, located in the western part of Nepal. It is a small town surrounded by hills about 3,000 meters above sea level. The landscape is very green and pleasant. The town has a nice mix of traditional and modern elements.' no you ni, motto seikaku de rikai shi yasui kotoba wo tsukatte kudasai.

示例: My hometown is Gal Good, located in the western part of Nepal. It is a small town surrounded by hills about 3,000 meters above sea level. The landscape is very green and pleasant. The town has a nice mix of traditional and modern elements.

建议: Answer no naka de, motto meikaku na kotoba to rikai shi yasui setsumei wo tsukatte kudasai. Mata, 'linking words' wo tsukatte setsuzoku wo yoku shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I like the people in my hometown because they are very hospitable and treat visitors kindly. In addition, the beautiful landscape around the town makes it a pleasant place to live.' no you ni kotaete kudasai.

示例: I like the people in my hometown because they are very hospitable and treat visitors kindly. In addition, the beautiful landscape around the town makes it a pleasant place to live.

建议: Answer wo motto seikaku ni shite, fukusetsu no setsumei wo rikai shi yasuku shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I have lived in my hometown for about 16 years. Although I moved away to follow my father's work, I try to visit during holidays. I have many fond memories of the community and look forward to visiting again.' no you ni kotaete kudasai.

示例: I have lived in my hometown for about 16 years. Although I moved away to follow my father's work, I try to visit during holidays. I have many fond memories of the community and look forward to visiting again.

建议: Answer wo motto rikai shi yasuku, seikaku na kotoba to setsuzoku wo tsukatte kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, my hometown is a safe place for young people. The government has implemented strict policies to ensure social security. Moreover, there are many services related to education and health, which benefit young residents.' no you ni kotaete kudasai.

示例: Yes, my hometown is a safe place for young people. The government has implemented strict policies to ensure social security. Moreover, there are many services related to education and health, which benefit young residents.

× My hometown is located in western part of Nepal which is go by the name Gal Good.

✓ My hometown is located in the western part of Nepal which is called Gal Good.

The phrase 'western part' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific part of Nepal. Also, 'go by the name' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'called' to indicate the name of the place.

× which is go by the name Gal Good.

✓ which is called Gal Good.

The verb 'go' is incorrectly used here; the correct past participle form 'called' should be used to describe the name of the place.

× It is a palace surrounded by hills uh around 3M high from the sea level.

✓ It is a place surrounded by hills about 3 meters high from sea level.

The word 'palace' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'place'. Also, '3M' should be written as '3 meters' for clarity. The phrase 'from the sea level' should be 'from sea level' without 'the'.

× The greenery landscape is period pleasant and it has quite mixing of old traditional and new modern tales which is the most.

✓ The green landscape is very pleasant and it has quite a mix of old traditional and new modern styles, which is the best part.

'Greenery landscape' is incorrect; 'green landscape' is correct. 'Period pleasant' is unclear; 'very pleasant' is appropriate. 'Quite mixing' should be 'quite a mix'. 'Tales' is incorrect; 'styles' fits better. 'Which is the most' is incomplete; 'which is the best part' clarifies the meaning.

× the people who are very hospitable or they treat other people as as a messenger from the car.

✓ the people who are very hospitable and treat other people as messengers from God.

'Messenger' should be plural 'messengers' to agree with 'people'. 'From the car' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'from God' is a common phrase meaning respect for others.

× And another thing is the beauty of the landscape around visible overture.

✓ Another thing is the beauty of the surrounding landscape visible everywhere.

'The beauty of the landscape around visible overture' is awkward and unclear. 'Surrounding landscape visible everywhere' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I've lived here there for about 16 years.

✓ I've lived here for about 16 years.

The phrase 'here there' is redundant and incorrect; only 'here' is needed.

× However, I left place to pursue my father's stories.

✓ However, I left the place to pursue my father's studies.

'Stories' is incorrect; likely intended 'studies'. Also, 'left place' needs the definite article 'the' before 'place'.

× But I always try to visit honey.

✓ But I always try to visit home.

'Honey' is a mispronunciation or typo; the correct word is 'home'.

× But I get chance or during my holidays.

✓ But I get a chance during my holidays.

The phrase 'or during my holidays' is incorrect; it should be 'during my holidays' without 'or'.

× I have many fond memories of the people in the community there and I would like to visit one.

✓ I have many fond memories of the people in the community there and I would like to visit once again.

'Visit one' is incorrect; 'visit once again' or 'visit there again' is appropriate.

× Yeah, it is very safe, safe to leave for the our young people.

✓ Yeah, it is very safe to live for our young people.

'Safe to leave' is incorrect; it should be 'safe to live'. Also, 'the our' is redundant; only 'our' is needed.

× It is because the government has reinforced some stick policy so that everybody, nobody could face any serious problem now related to her related to the Social Security and and even there are lots of services related to education and health.

✓ It is because the government has reinforced some strict policies so that nobody faces any serious problems related to social security, and there are also many services related to education and health.

'Stick policy' should be 'strict policies'. 'Everybody, nobody could face' is contradictory; 'nobody faces' is correct. 'Her' is incorrect pronoun here and should be removed. 'Social Security' should not be capitalized unless referring to a specific program. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammar.