家乡— Part 1 评分报告

× Uh, there is not a big city but I love there so much.

✓ Uh, it is not a big city but I love it so much.

这里的句子结构不正确，'there is not a big city' 用法错误，应该用 'it is not a big city' 来指代家乡。'there' 用法错误，应该用 'it' 来指代前文提到的城市。

× I was was born and raised there.

✓ I was born and raised there.

句子中出现了重复的动词 'was'，应删除多余的 'was'，保持过去时态的正确表达。

× There are lots of umm, great memories for me.

✓ There are lots of umm, great memories of me.

表达“对我来说有很多美好回忆”时，应该用介词 'of' 而不是 'for'。

× Firstly, the local people are quite approachable and friendly, which gives me a big sense of comfortable and belongs.

✓ Firstly, the local people are quite approachable and friendly, which gives me a big sense of comfort and belonging.

'comfortable' 是形容词，应该用名词 'comfort'；'belongs' 是动词，应该用名词 'belonging'。这里需要用名词形式来表达“舒适感和归属感”。

× Secondly, the authentic local dishes are always delicious, amazing, I enjoy hanging.

✓ Secondly, the authentic local dishes are always delicious and amazing, I enjoy eating them.

'hanging' 用法错误，应该用 'eating' 来表达“享受吃当地菜”。

× I was born and raised there until 22 years old, when at that time I need to work in Shanghai to explore, umm, better professional career.

✓ I was born and raised there until I was 22 years old, when I needed to work in Shanghai to explore, umm, a better professional career.

时间点应使用过去时态，'need' 应改为过去时 'needed'，并且补充主语 'I'，使句子完整。

× For those people who are introverted or haven't ambitious career or dreams, my hometown is quite suitable for them.

✓ For those people who are introverted or don't have ambitious careers or dreams, my hometown is quite suitable for them.

'haven't' 用法错误，应该用 'don't have'；'career' 应用复数 'careers' 来匹配 'ambitious' 修饰的复数概念。

× But for others who are ambitious, I believe those big cities like Shanghai.

✓ But for others who are ambitious, I believe big cities like Shanghai are better for them.

句子缺少谓语动词，导致结构不完整，需补充谓语 'are better for them' 使句子完整通顺。