家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中有语法错误和重复词汇，且表达不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，注意语法时态和单复数形式。

示例: My hometown is Ohan, the capital city of Hubei province. It is famous for its many lakes, with over a thousand scattered throughout the city. These lakes create a pleasant atmosphere and attract many tourists every year.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题。建议使用连词连接句子，注意动词形式和时态，表达更连贯。

示例: I like the lakes and rivers the most because they provide beautiful scenery. Moreover, they offer excellent places for relaxation, where people can fly kites or take refreshing walks along the riverbank after a long day.

建议: 回答表达基本清晰，但语法和用词有待改进。建议使用正确的时态和更自然的表达方式，避免重复。

示例: I have lived in this city since I was 12 years old, right after graduating from primary school. So, I have been here for over 15 years and have developed a strong emotional connection with the city and its people. It holds many wonderful memories for me.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够流畅。建议使用连词连接句子，注意名词复数形式，避免重复。

示例: Yes, definitely. There are many famous universities in the city, which create a great atmosphere for studying. Additionally, you can meet many young people who share your interests because of the large student population.

× Uh, the city is famous for its lakes and they are over thou 1000 lakes in in the city, uh, which make the atmosphere quite good and attracted a lot of tourists every year.

✓ Uh, the city is famous for its lakes and there are over 1000 lakes in the city, which make the atmosphere quite good and attract a lot of tourists every year.

这里“they are over thou 1000 lakes”中的“they”用法错误，应该用“there are”表示“有”，且“thou 1000”应为“1000”。此外，“attracted”应改为“attract”与主语“lakes”保持一致。

× Uh, the city is famous for its lakes and they are over thou 1000 lakes in in the city, uh, which make the atmosphere quite good and attracted a lot of tourists every year.

✓ Uh, the city is famous for its lakes and there are over 1000 lakes in the city, which make the atmosphere quite good and attract a lot of tourists every year.

“attracted”是过去分词，这里应使用一般现在时“attract”，因为描述的是常态事实。

× It provides good scenery and an excellent place to relaxed people can fly kites or just walking alongside the riverbank that is quite a refreshing after long days walk.

✓ It provides good scenery and an excellent place to relax. People can fly kites or just walk alongside the riverbank, which is quite refreshing after long days' walk.

“to relaxed”应为不定式“to relax”，表示目的；“just walking”应改为动词原形“just walk”，因为前面是并列句。

× I began to live in this city since I was 12 years old, just graduated from primary school.

✓ I began to live in this city when I was 12 years old, just after graduating from primary school.

“since”用于表示从过去某时持续到现在，搭配完成时态；这里用“when”更合适，且“just graduated”应改为“just after graduating”以符合语法。

× Sure. I will say there are a lot of famous university in this city which makes a great atmosphere for study.

✓ Sure. I will say there are a lot of famous universities in this city which make a great atmosphere for study.

“university”应使用复数“universities”，因为前面有“a lot of”，且谓语动词“makes”应改为“make”与复数主语一致。