家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Apni answer e kichu language error ache, jemon 'I lived' er bodole 'I live' bola uchit, karon apni ekhono sekhane thaken. Apnar answer e aro kichu linking words use korle bhalo hoto, ebong sentence gulo ke aro natural korte hobe.

示例: I live in Mathura, which is a small town located between Jatrabari and Demra. I have been living there since I was born, and my parents also grew up there.

建议: Apnar answer e repetition ache, jemon 'I like everything' and 'I love my hometown' ek sathe bola hoyeche, ja avoid kora uchit. Apni aro specific details dite paren ebong linking words use korte paren jate answer ta natural lage.

示例: I really love my hometown because it has many beautiful places. For example, Golgula Park is my favorite spot where I go every weekend to relax and spend some quality time.

建议: Apnar answer e kichu spelling mistakes ache, jemon 'Mato aisle' and 'Matulis' jeta 'Mathura' hote pare. Sentence structure o complex ebong confusing. Apni simple ebong clear sentence use korun, ebong linking words diye coherence baran.

示例: I have been living in Mathura since I was born. My parents, brother, and sister have also lived there all their lives.

建议: Apnar answer e kichu redundancy ache, jemon 'Of course, definitely' ek sathe use kora. Apni aro specific details dite paren ebong linking words use kore answer ke natural banate paren.

示例: Yes, my hometown is a great place for young people because it offers good educational facilities, well-equipped gyms, beautiful lakes, and a swimming pool for recreation.

× I lived in Mathura and it's a small town between Jatrabari and Demra.

✓ I have lived in Mathura and it's a small town between Jatrabari and Demra.

The student is talking about a place they still live in, so the present perfect tense 'have lived' is more appropriate than the simple past 'lived'. This tense shows the action started in the past and continues to the present.

× I have been living there since my birth and my parents also grew up there.

✓ I have been living there since my birth and my parents also grew up there.

The sentence is correct in tense usage; no correction needed here.

× The park name is Golgula Park and I go every weekend in the park to relax myself and spend some quality time.

✓ The park's name is Golgula Park and I go to the park every weekend to relax and spend some quality time.

'The park name' should be 'The park's name' to show possession. Also, 'go every weekend in the park' is incorrect; it should be 'go to the park every weekend'. 'Relax myself' is unnatural; 'relax' alone is sufficient.

× I have been living in Mato aisle since my birth as well as my parents also living in Matulis since their birth as well as my brother and my sister also the same way.

✓ I have been living in Mato Aisle since my birth, and my parents have also been living in Mato Aisle since their birth, as well as my brother and my sister.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'My parents also living' should be 'my parents have also been living' to match the present perfect continuous tense. The phrase 'also the same way' is unclear and unnecessary.

× because my hometown has good education qualities, good gyms, good lakes and good swimming pool for the swimming purpose.

✓ because my hometown has good educational facilities, good gyms, good lakes, and a good swimming pool for swimming purposes.

'Education qualities' is incorrect; 'educational facilities' or 'education quality' is better. 'Swimming pool' is singular, so it needs the article 'a'. 'For the swimming purpose' is unnatural; 'for swimming purposes' is more natural.