家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer wa chotto muzukashii desu. 'Saidama prefecture' wa machigatte imasu. Osaka wa Osaka-fu ni arimasu. Soshite, 'most uh half of them is elderly people' wa rikai shi nikui desu. Motto shizen de wakariyasui kotoba o tsukatte kudasai. Tatoeba, 'My hometown is Osaka, a large city in Japan. It has a population of about 100,000 people, and many of them are elderly.' to iu fuu ni.

示例: My hometown is Osaka, a large city in Japan. It has a population of about 100,000 people, and many of them are elderly.

建议: Kotae wa sukoshi fukuzatsu de, imi ga wakari nikui desu. 'legend came here' wa tokuni imi ga fumei desu. Motto shizen na kotoba to rikai shi yasui setsumei o shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I like the big summer festival in August because many people from different parts of the city come to enjoy it together.' to iu fuu ni.

示例: I like the big summer festival in August because many people from different parts of the city come to enjoy it together.

建议: Kotae wa fukuzatsu de, bunpou no machigai ga arimasu. 'riveted' wa machigatta kotoba desu. 'Narima' wa 'Nerima' no kamoshiremasen. Soshite, bun no owari ga nakute imi ga tsuzuite imasu. Motto kantan de seikaku ni kotaete kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I have lived in Osaka for almost 16 years. Before that, I lived in Nerima, Tokyo, but my family grew when I was four years old, so we moved.' to iu fuu ni.

示例: I have lived in Osaka for almost 16 years. Before that, I lived in Nerima, Tokyo, but my family grew when I was four years old, so we moved.

建议: Kotae wa yoku dekimashita ga, 'there is 2 high school' wa 'there are two high schools' to shite kudasai. Soshite, motto rikai shi yasui you ni setsumei o tsukete kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, my hometown is good for young people because it has two high schools and more than four junior high schools. Also, medical expenses are free for students up to high school age.' to iu fuu ni.

示例: Yes, my hometown is good for young people because it has two high schools and more than four junior high schools. Also, medical expenses are free for students up to high school age.

× My hometown is Osaka which is located to Saidama prefecture and there is around 100,000 people in there and most uh half of them is elderly people.

✓ My hometown is Osaka which is located in Saidama prefecture and there are around 100,000 people there and most, uh, half of them are elderly people.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect when indicating location; 'in' should be used instead. Also, 'there is around 100,000 people' is incorrect because 'people' is plural, so 'there are' is correct. Additionally, 'in there' is redundant; 'there' suffices. Finally, 'most uh half of them is elderly people' has subject-verb agreement errors; 'half of them are elderly people' is correct.

× My hometown is Osaka which is located to Saidama prefecture and there is around 100,000 people in there and most uh half of them is elderly people.

✓ My hometown is Osaka which is located in Saidama prefecture and there are around 100,000 people there and most, uh, half of them are elderly people.

The pronoun 'them' correctly refers to 'people' which is plural, so the verb should agree in plural form as 'are' not 'is'.

× My favorite point of Osaka town is it has a big summer festival in August and umm, not only legend came here but also uh other part of city resident come here and enjoy spending time.

✓ My favorite point of Osaka town is that it has a big summer festival in August and, umm, not only locals come here but also other parts of the city residents come here and enjoy spending time.

The pronoun 'it' needs to be connected with 'that' to introduce the clause properly. 'Legend' is incorrect; likely 'locals' is intended. 'Other part of city resident' should be pluralized and preceded by 'other parts of the city residents' for clarity and correctness.

× I have riveted in Osaka for almost 16 years. I used to live in Tokyo Narima for my family, but umm, when I was four years old, umm, my mom pregnant and my family are increased, so I.

✓ I have lived in Osaka for almost 16 years. I used to live in Narima, Tokyo with my family, but, umm, when I was four years old, umm, my mom was pregnant and my family increased, so I moved.

The verb 'riveted' is incorrect; the correct past participle of 'live' is 'lived'. 'Tokyo Narima' should be 'Narima, Tokyo' for natural word order. 'My mom pregnant' lacks the verb 'was'. 'My family are increased' is incorrect; 'my family increased' or 'my family grew' is correct. The sentence is incomplete and needs a verb to finish the thought, e.g., 'so I moved.'

× Yes, I think my hometown is a good place for young people because there is 2 high school and more than four junior high school in my city and medical expenses is free up to high school students because of the support.

✓ Yes, I think my hometown is a good place for young people because there are 2 high schools and more than four junior high schools in my city and medical expenses are free up to high school students because of the support.

The phrase 'there is 2 high school' is incorrect because '2 high schools' is plural, so 'there are' should be used. Similarly, 'junior high school' should be pluralized to 'junior high schools'. 'Medical expenses is free' is incorrect; 'medical expenses are free' is correct because 'expenses' is plural.