家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Apni answer e sentence structure ar grammar bhalo kore use korun. Apnar uttor ta clear korte hobe, ar sentence gulo ke shothik vabe connect korte hobe. Apni 'My hometown is Nogan, which is a northern district of Bangladesh. I was born there and studied in a local school.' erokom vabe bolte paren.

示例: My hometown is Nogan, which is located in the northern district of Bangladesh. I was born there and completed my schooling at a local school in my town.

建议: Apnar uttor e aro specific details add korun ar sentence gulo ke shothik vabe link korun. Apni bolte paren, 'I like my hometown because it is very beautiful. For example, there is a big playground and a park near my house where I often spend time.'

示例: I like my hometown because it is very beautiful. For example, there is a big playground and a park near my house where I often spend time with my friends.

建议: Apnar uttor e time frame clear korun ar sentence gulo ke logically connect korun. Apni bolte paren, 'I lived there for about 15 to 20 years before moving to Dhaka for university. After graduating, I started working in a government job here and have been working since then.'

示例: I lived in my hometown for about 15 to 20 years. Then I moved to Dhaka to attend university. After graduating, I joined a government job here and have been working here ever since.

建议: Apni uttor e linking words use korun ar sentence gulo ke shothik vabe organize korun. Apni bolte paren, 'Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it has good government schools and colleges. Moreover, the community is friendly and the environment is peaceful.'

示例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it has good government schools and colleges. Moreover, the community is friendly and the environment is peaceful, which helps young people to grow well.

× My hometown name is Nogan is a Northern District of Bangladesh.

✓ My hometown's name is Nogan, which is a Northern District of Bangladesh.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper connectors. Adding a possessive form and a relative clause improves clarity and sentence structure.

× I born there and I have been studying there in the in my town in a school.

✓ I was born there and I have been studying in a school in my town.

The verb 'born' requires the auxiliary 'was' to form the past tense passive voice. Also, the phrase 'in the in my town' is redundant and corrected to 'in my town' for clarity.

× I do like about my hometown because my hometown is very much beautiful.

✓ I like my hometown because it is very beautiful.

The phrase 'I do like about' is incorrect; 'I like' suffices. 'Very much beautiful' is ungrammatical; 'very beautiful' is correct.

× There is a big playground near my house and a park and.

✓ There is a big playground and a park near my house.

The original sentence ends abruptly and has an unnecessary 'and' at the end. Rearranging the sentence improves clarity and completeness.

× I have lived there for around 15 to 20 years, then I come to my university and then graduated from that university and joining a government job in Dhaka and I'm working here till now.

✓ I lived there for around 15 to 20 years, then I went to university, graduated from it, joined a government job in Dhaka, and I have been working here until now.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. 'Have lived' is acceptable but 'then I come' should be past tense 'went'. 'Joining' should be past tense 'joined'. The corrected sentence uses consistent past tense and present perfect for ongoing action.

× Yes, my hometown is very much good place for the young people, because people can, young people can have education there because there is a good government school, there is a good government college and also there are good people there.

✓ Yes, my hometown is a very good place for young people because they can get an education there. There is a good government school, a good government college, and also good people.

'Very much good' is incorrect; 'very good' is correct. 'People can, young people can have education' is redundant and awkward; simplified to 'they can get an education'. Articles are added for clarity.